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Angel Child

Under a reddish gold sun.
Hidden in the clouds.
A girl lingers by the side of the path.
Visible to people passing by.
She doesn't speak a word.
The angel child
with electron wings.

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I'm not sure what this poem is about. I imagined the girl on the path in the picture as an angel or a ghost. I wrote this on a whim, so it might not be my best. Please tell me what you think.

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  • harjeet
    July 6

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    now i really think that you should write some stories. You are great at painting vision by words. i think it would be great,... a story with Poetry, Philosophy and Quantum Physics in it.


    Angel Writer..


    • HaleyMary
      July 6
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      Thanks, Jeet. I will try writing some more stories when I get inspired. I actually am working on a play about reincarnation with a subscriber of mine called DeathsPictures otherwise known as D, that will have some philosophical ideas and quantum physics in it. Oddly enough it started off as a story about a quarter life crisis, and now it's turned into something completely different. Who knows where the story could go next.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    October 4, 2008

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    I did enjoy this lovely write indeed congrtulations on your hm best wishes always be well

    • HaleyMary
      October 4, 2008
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      Thanks. I wasn't sure about this poem. This I didn't spend a whole lot of time on. Usually I like to spend a few days on a write, but this one I got up in about an hour. Thanks for the nice wishes.


  • DolphinLass silver member
    June 30, 2008
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    well done ...very image filled

  • Revwilliamfoos
    May 1, 2008
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    very intresting my dear sis the wings make my hair stand on end
    love your bro rev papa


    • HaleyMary
      May 4, 2008

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      Thanks, William. Hope you enjoyed the poem. I always appreciate your comments.

  • JosieCheese
    April 21, 2008

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    I really really liked this piece, it was soothing and refreshing to read, it was a great way to start a day, i saw a pretty smile and face being there for all those having a couldy day and this girl provides comfort for those people, i like how you were honest that you werent sure what you thought the poem was about, sometimes those can be the best, wonderful piece of work

    • HaleyMary
      April 21, 2008
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      Hi, Josie. Haven't seen you by here in awhile. Yeah, you're right that the poems when people aren't sure what they're exactly about can be the best. I figure just let the reader decide for themselves what the piece means. Thanks for the comment.


  • Desire gold member
    April 18, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: Angel Child
    This piece tugged at my Heartstrings and I read several times and for some reason...
    kept seeing X-Men...
    I know it sounds strange...but I was seeing I think he is Warren: the Angel~
    If You have seen the movie recently or admire his character ...I kept seeing his images while reading Your words
    Wonderful images You have shared~~

    These lines grabbed and pulled~
    She doesn't speak a word.
    The angel child
    with electron wings.
    Love that word: electron wings
    Magnificent take on the prompt~

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

    • HaleyMary
      April 21, 2008
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      Thanks. Desire. Yeah, I added in the electron part, me and my quantum physics.
      Thanks for the honorable trophy.


  • Spiritual Soul gold member
    April 16, 2008

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    I think it's a beautiful write, I can see the picture in my mind.
    Blessings,
    ~Michaela~

    • HaleyMary
      April 16, 2008
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      Thanks, Michaela. I don't think this is one of my best poems, but I tried.

      Thanks so much for the comment. Always appreciate it.


  • ckwriter69
    April 15, 2008

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    Good visual image here Haley. Has a mysterious feel to it, and raises questions as to why it is there at this time and place. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.


  • Tarja
    April 15, 2008

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    I actually liked this a lot. I think that there could have been a bit more imagery about her... but yeah overall it was great. That picture is chilling and I think you went in an awesome direction with the prompt. Well done love. Good luck.

    • HaleyMary
      April 15, 2008
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      Thanks, Ashleigh. I wasn't too sure about the poem at first. You're right about the imagery, though. I could've added more in. I appreciate you stopping by my page and commenting.


  • VerminVomit
    April 14, 2008

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    picture paintingishy

    this poem is short but its long... like its short in length but its long in...well, it describes the child really well


  • Eyes Wide Shut gold member
    April 14, 2008
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    Awe (:
    I like it.
    It's so beautiful.

    • HaleyMary
      April 14, 2008
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      Thanks, Austyn. I don't think it's my best work honestly, but glad you liked it. Thanks for the comment. Hope you've had a good start to the week.

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