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Heavenly Faite

The beuaty of the sky is breathtaking and I see nothing but love accending from the sky above.
There are people here I have never seen but, yet I know them somehow though.
The smiling faces of the people surrounding me on, a blessed day that seems to have been taken from my memory.
Can this be real and true, will the feeling of everlasting happiness last forever?
Is This what it is like when you finally come tomeet your heavenly faite?.

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  • Desire gold member
    April 18, 2008

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    Thank You!

    Thank You for Your entry: Heavenly Faite
    This piece tugged at Spirit and I read several times and kept seeing like the sunrise and the sunset...
    but more of an eclipse...
    like time stood still...as Life passed by~

    Because this is anonymous...
    I normally would send any spelling hiccups via IM but am unable to because of anonymity...Sorry...

    Just wanted to toss this suggestion Your way
    ~*~
    The beauty of the sky is breathtaking and I see nothing
    but love accending from the sky above.
    There are people here I have never seen
    but yet I know them somehow though.
    The smiling faces of the people surrounding me
    on a blessed day seems to have been taken
    from my memory.
    Can this be real and true?
    Will the feeling of everlasting happiness last forever?
    Is this what it is like when you finally
    come to meet your heavenly fate?

    Looks like in the title...You have an i in faite...
    Unless there is an i in the word...I only know as Fate....but I will triple check

    This is just a suggestion and nothing written in stone...
    In a comment box...it can be tricky to see how the lines pan out...
    but Powerful images You have shared~~

    These lines grabbed and pulled~
    The smiling faces of the people surrounding me on, a blessed day that seems to have been taken from my memory.
    Magnificent take on the prompt~

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~