Don't be in such a hurry to grow up, boy
The future has nothing to offer you,
not with what you want to to do;
And be careful of who you talk to.
So many things you haven't seen,
so many places you haven't been,
They'll still be there when you're ready,
so don't worry.
That light behind your eyes, don't ever put it out;
the evening's coming on and you'll need it.
Author notes
Honestly, the words just came into my head and I wrote them down. I thought about adding more, but I was dissatisfied with anything else, and I think this serves purpose enough.
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I've had that happen before. I want to add more, but it just feels like that's all I can do. I've been training myself to listen to that instinct and leave things alone. And this is fantastic! I love the last two lines especially. Perfect.
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Ok, I'm gonna break this down cuz I love this so much!
Stanza one~ This is great advice itself. It could stand on it's own and have nothing else added to it.
Stanza two~ True, things will wait for us in life. My mmum is always telling me to slow down and stop growing up so fast
I love that you added "so dont' worry" because so often, youngsters are dying to grow up. Also, this is applicable to kids/young adults of all ages.
Stanza three~ SUPERB! "The evening's coming and you'll need it" People often say "You have such a fire about you" or "you have a flame in you" but I never thought that you'd need it later in life!! Great write my dear friend. I LOVED this one! I'm bookmarking it for sure!
Warmest,
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Wow, I'm flattered!
I'm glad you liked this!
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"So many things you haven't seen,
so many places you haven't been,
They'll still be there when you're ready,
so don't worry." I liked that part the whole poem was amazingly done well. Wonderful job.
..<3..
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Thank you very much Shelly.
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This poem says a thousand things.
There are a LOT of ways to take this poem. I like that about it. Multi-dimensional. That's what is great about writing straight from the mind to the paper-- without analytical thought hindering the poem. Not that analytical thought is always a hinderance... but it's more useful in story writing than anything. In poetry, it's better to just--let go of the words and let them fall where they may.
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Thank you. A few of my poems have a duality or multi-purpose to them. Those are my favorites because people find so much in them. Thanks for commenting.
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Nicely written.
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Thank you.
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Eye Opening
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Thank you!
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Your welcome!!!!
It was well done, you have good talent. If you would, please read some of my poems and comment. I would suggest 'Broken Heart' first. -
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Thank you, and I will go do that.
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Wise
The words od wisdom in the short but intelligent write speaks out to be heard by many of our youth. Times flys, try & slow it down. And Ty for your kind comment on my poem
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Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed it and left such a nice comment.
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well done!
The light behind you eyes was very wise, and will
lead you well through life!
loved it...and yes...it is so restless the yearnings
when we are young, i have a feeling you are going to
make your dreams really happen!
ears/Seattle well done! well done!
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As always, thank you very much for reading and commenting so graciously. I'm trying so much harder with every new poem I write, and I think it's beginning to pay off. I think this one is very universal. Thank you again.
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Great write here
Indeed the young in such a hurry to be grown up unknowing of all they are missing .So often adults as in looking back see such an abundance of times they wish they had slowed down and truly looked at what they had only its too late. The young people forget to truly know who their parents and grand parents are they never ask them questions of what made them what they are until its too late . Life was meant to be lived yet to slow the pace down can only bring love joy life and the foundation on which adulthood can only flourish with fond memories.
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Thank you for reviewing. And the problem with kids and teenagers today is that we are expected to grow up faster, to be smarter and more responsible NOW. It's difficult to let that inner child live sometimes.
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Honestly, I like where your thoughts took you on this one. It seems slightly unfinished, but I don't know what you could add to it to make it any better. It all flowed together quite nicely I will admit. I love your first four lines. They are beautiful. I really don't even know what to say. Great job hun! =]
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Thanks babe! =^_^= I know, I felt it was unfinished too, but I also couldn't figure out what else to do with it. Yeah, I actually don't know where the first verse came from; the lines popped into my head, I wrote them down, and then I thought: "What the hell did I just write?" Thanks you for the compliment!
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No problem hun. I'm sitting here thinking of ways in which to improve it or... I dunno. There's just something about it that I can't quite figure out and it's about to drive me up a wall. Good thing you wrote down those words that just "popped" into your head. Still, its a good read.
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I wouldn't think too hard; you should see the page I wrote this on. It's covered in half-finished ideas with lines crossed through them. What are you trying to figure out? and thank you.
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