Broken heart - cried.
Begging - pity,
Begging - guilt.
Instead - anger .
Ripping ribs apart
Now your heart
Strewn accross the table,
I give - broken heart -
needles -
and knives.
I give - broken heart.
Author notes
Wow... 30 words. This was difficult. But it was an interesting task at the same time
Based on the Picture prompt ... on top.
A contest entry
- PIF (and hopefully quick) by luna-midnight.
300 points, ended April 20, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
-
desperation and surrender
strong feelings so quickly put
impressive
-
a good piece of poetry, the repetition works well here i think, a fast and furious read, taking the reader on a whirlwind journey.
-
this is definatly desriptive of that picture wow what a picture it is, nice write
-
very intresting write...very painful and descrpitive
thnaks so much for your entry and good luck
take care
stephanie
Adding your comment:
