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good bye

the sting or the razor peircing my skin.
the fellings i keep locked within.
the blood pours out,
the tears they roll,
down my face so wet and cold.
My heart it aches,
it hurts, it bleeds.
cant you see its you i need.
or do you see but do not care,
about the pain that is so clear,
that every stranger stpos to stare,
at the girl with short black hair,
who has cuts on her wrists,
and skin so fair.
but the only person who can help her.
is the boy who beats her,
and calles her a whore.
she apologizes,
he still yells more,
thats my story about you,
when you ended it i was glad we were throu.
but then why do i cry,
and feel so much pain?
why shoud i care about the boy who cant spell my name?
the thoughts of my death theyv become to much.
suicide has its grip on me,
i can feel its tight clutch.
my cut bleeds out, its to late to stop.
so now that im dead i hope you can see,
how much you realy ment to me.
good bye.

its a bit long compared to what i usualy write but still tell me if you liked it.

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  • the-emo-you-love
    May 8, 2008
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    Amazing!

    WOAH!
    That was so Intense!
    I loved it~!
    It seemed so real<3
    & From the looks of it,Yew deserve alot better then THAT boy...


  • Candy Morphine
    April 15, 2008

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    WOAH.
    this is amazing
    its so beautifully writtin
    its just mind blowing

    i envy your talent so much.
    this is insane.!!!
    well done!


  • ucancallmereal
    April 14, 2008
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    wow this is beautiful this moved me to tears. its really sad, though if you dont mind me asking is this from personal experience? cuz its too good to be thought up i think this is one of the best poems about cutting that i think ive read.. wonderful flow amazing write =]


    • I-hope-im-not-alone
      May 5, 2008
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      thanks.ya it is from personal experience and i dont realy mind telling other people about my life so ask away. im glad you liked it so much.


  • Sound of Madness
    April 14, 2008
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    I really like this, it's so sad and just wow, great job.


  • she still smiles x gold member
    April 14, 2008

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    beautiful...

    Wow, this was really intense, I had tears in my eyes reading it...
    beautiful job -- and thanks so much for the comment on my guestbook! :] Hope we can become friends! Keep writing -- you have amazing talent<3


  • AngelOfBrokenSouls
    April 14, 2008
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    I liked it a lot. I hope to read more poems from you

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