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It supposed to be a Serenade


 

My words gurgle

floating over to you 

like springtime waters

down the mountains

free, rhymeless,

I share with you 

flowers' morning secret

the opening of sepals

and the unfolding of petals

when they sip with me 

the aphrodisiac of dew

and the light of sun.

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  • Room without doors gold member
    May 7, 2008

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    Outstanding

    This poem is full of rich imagery that delights the reader with a wonderful sense of simplicity. I loved the whole concept of the stream flowing down the mountainside. This is a strong poem full of creativity.


  • tara wilson gold member
    April 14, 2008

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    wow - this is soooooo lovely

    I LOVE the imagery, sensation & the colors gleaming from this poem - whew...beautiful poetry, Sonja!!

  • Namita
    April 14, 2008

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    Very very beautiful... this whispers of love and beauty; such an exquisite write, Sonja. Beautiful

    - namita


  • Peteskid gold member
    April 14, 2008

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    wonderful imagery here of the spring sensations and sounds..a mood of soft stated happiness...so very well done...PK


  • kaibab silver member
    April 14, 2008

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    I am craving wound to feather,
    in healing gust of primal weather,
    enhancing trusting, crave of creature
    to bare beggging, as newer feature...

    this is wonderful ...thanks so much


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    April 14, 2008

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    Quite lovely. Beautifully cascading with wistful light. Loved this. ~Pamela


  • Puppydog gold member
    April 14, 2008

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    BEAUTIFUL!!!!

    I can hear the trickling water, feel the sun's warm rays, and smell the fresh and sweet aroma of the morning flower.


  • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
    April 14, 2008
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    It is beautiful and free flowing like the stream it represents.

    well done

    ken


  • Nicolette gold member
    April 14, 2008

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    As always your poetry carries within it the soft whispers of love, romance and nature. This is lovely poetry....it murmurs like water over stones.

    ~ Nicolette


  • morningstar1948 gold member
    April 14, 2008

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    Beautiful & Perfect

    Yhis is so beautiful and full of life of mother earth. You show re[ect fpr jer. This is indeed a great write my sister. I miss you.I love you too little sister

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