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Dreams without soul

Night and day,
dreams divide.

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  • notorious gold member
    April 16, 2008

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    Brevity much?
    Anyways, I think an 'In' could have been inserted in the first line to make:

    In night and day,
    dreams divide.

    Though I like short poems sometimes, I think this one could have been expanded into something more fleshed out. These 2 lines sounded like a quote prompt and not really a poem in itself...if you ever decide to hold a contest...


  • Tattboyspet
    April 15, 2008
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    thank you for your entry