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Save the Song

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Save the Song

Song of freedom’s peace, in her crystal song,
cries like silken fleece, piercing vibrant cries.
Along our portside rail, beauty swam along;
arise the white cap swale, feelings now arise.

Dive into your dreams, watch the beauty dive,
across our bow it seems; magic swims across.
Strive to hear her voice as we watch her strive;
loss is but a choice; can’t afford the loss.

Hear her song of peace while she is still here,
harm to whales must cease, let’s prevent the harm.
Fear that's in the sea; help us stop the fear;
charm the apathy, we can win with charm.

Save the whales, teach our children we must save;
grave are the tales of singing from the grave.

 

 

 

Author notes

 Shadow Sonnet with internal rhyme.

Shadow Sonnet:

Shadow Sonnet created by Amera M. Andersen may be written in any sonnet style. The Shadow takes place at the beginning and ending of each line as the words are identical or homophonic.
14 lines
9 or 10 syllables per line
Should have a volta or pivot
Iambic pentameter is not necessary

Form source: shadowpoetry.com
Photo: artist unknown

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  • Ellis gold member
    February 8
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    Great message; great poem

    This is such a neat form that you created!


  • Swan song gold member
    November 28, 2008

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    Another stunning sonnet that you dear have pulled off. I seen killer whales before in Blaine Wa
    your lovely poem does them justice

  • piccola silver member
    June 10, 2008

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    great rhyme and not yet a trophy winner Thank you for entering


  • Ithica silver member
    April 23, 2008

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    I don't think there will ever come a day you can't impress me... This is just beautiful and one of your Shadow Sonnets like no one but you can do!!!

  • piccola silver member
    April 21, 2008
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    reminds me, we are planning a whale watching trip soon and I so look foward to it. Thank you so much for the beautiful entry.


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    April 18, 2008

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    wow you really know how to knock us "baby poets" out! This is so magnificent! you did such a splendid job and I am so stunned to see that you can take ANY form and master it. Have you ever done a Ballad?

    Very lovely! So well done!

    All the best
    Becks


  • Barely Breathing gold member
    April 16, 2008

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    This is amazing. I loved reading through this. It was so effortless to read and the imagery is amazing. YOu have done so well here and all the best for the contest.


  • simpliterature
    April 15, 2008
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    Very well done write and very informative notes.
    Thanks for sharing.


  • Topaze
    April 15, 2008

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    A very well written piece full of love a compassion that I can not help but to hear so loud and clear!


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    April 15, 2008
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    Again, and ingenious piece of writing. I hope it does well in the contest.


  • second-born
    April 15, 2008

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    wow...this is a very elegant song...and it's not just any song but a beatifully crafted sonnet with an environmental cause...your words are truly an inspiration to others!


  • PerVirtuous
    April 15, 2008

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    This is an amazing shadow sonnet. Perhaps the best one I have seen yet. I think this is a worthy subject matter and hope you spur many to act. Thank you for this.


  • albymyheart gold member
    April 14, 2008

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    You have excellent writing skills, you blow me away. I haven't seen this form before but I like it and you have accomplished it so well. I noticed your internal rhyme straight away which only adds to the complexity of this write, yet it flows with its beautiful message like the water in the pic...alby


  • Desire gold member
    April 14, 2008

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    Oh Dang!!


    Beautiful piece You have penned and I am so slow on the contest tip~
    Love the message and the passion You have shared with us here

    Magnificent form and Inspiration!
    Hear her song of peace while she is still here,
    harm to whales must cease, let’s prevent the harm.
    Fear that's in the sea; help us stop the fear;
    charm the apathy, we can win with charm.
    These words tugged at the Heart

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

  • Ithica silver member
    April 14, 2008
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    I don't know how you do it! I can barely manage and end rhyme or one in a while an internal!!! But you do everything with such ease... swapping the end rhyme and making it seem so easy, but I'm not fooled!!!

  • Ithica silver member
    April 14, 2008
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    I don't know how you do it! I can barely manage and end rhyme or one in a while an internal!!! But you do everything with such ease... swapping the end rhyme and making it seem so easy, but I'm not fooled!!!


  • StarEyes
    April 14, 2008

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    Oh my goodness, You wiould think I would be used to all your forms by now but nope, I am always in awe everytime I read one This is fantastic! What a great job you did on this one!! I love it!!

    Best of luck in this contest!!!!


    and love

    Nyetta


    • Amera gold member
      April 14, 2008
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      aww... thanks
      That was tricky, I used my form but adding the internal rhyme was a challenge.

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