It's come the time to make my chioce,
Its eithor you or them.
Funny how it has come to this
Over all that time.
"I won't be held down,
By who I used to be,
She's NOTHING to me"
All that we have been through,
It doesn't matter now.
I can't help whats to come...
I know my faults,
"But you know,
I'm not the only one"
Now I am moving on,
I'm not leaving much behind.
Friends often come and go;
But look who I'm talking to,
Of course you should know.
There is now way
That we can continue,
What we never had.
I know you think I'm pathetic and lame,
But I don't really care,
Cause I'm the one leaving you
And there is nothing you can do.
How do you think that I can improve? What was your first emotional response?
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This is a very strong write. It makes me think of a relationship break-up. I think this would bring a lot of strength and comfort to people who have recently suffered a break-up; you write with a sense of inner power and pride. Very eloquent too Well done on a great write!
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THAT IS AWESOME
THAT IS AWESOME SOME OF THOSE LINES ARE FROM SOME OF EVANESCENCES SONGS I AM A BIG FAN OF HER YOU ARE AWESOME!!! -
There is no way
That we can continue
What we never had.
Great strength in these lines, a lot of wisdom too- perhaps using after rather than over may work better in line 4, I liked this a lot. keep penning!
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Brilliant
The first line, I believe you mean, "choice"
Overall this piece is brilliant - I see the challenges presented but an awarness that has furthered to growth.
Brilliant write.
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I wouldn't say you are lame or pathetic, no way. Just the opposite, strong at heart and very talented with a head on your shoulders!
This is a terrific poem!
Lacey
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This was brilliantly said!!! And MAD PEOPLE ARE A GOOD THING!!! Never cower to them...be strong and take no prisoners!!! This was straight and in the face!! Well done....Hope this person got the message!
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Its very well expressed and shows your strong character...you've done an incredible job by expressing your feelings...and we all know for a fact that you are not lame at all...so don't care whatever anyone says!!! Great Job!!!
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you know, this is just what I told my ex... for many reasons, but you know, we all have feelings, and sometimes, without knowing why, we just know we need to move on. I think you did a great job on this one!!!
and love
Nyetta
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Emma whats wrong with you your making people mad!!!!!!!!! HELLO mad People NOT a good thing!!!!!!!! -
I have a question. How am I taking my obsession to the next level. I am not obsessed and what is the next level?
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