When you waved farewell, your shape was hardly legible to me.
From my windowsill perch, your limbs were lost to the autumn leaves.
I stiffly, reluctantly slipped inside; this was no proper goodbye.
How could you only be important to me when I can't look you in the eye?
Climb down those branches, and forget me as you do.
Be careful on the way down, for no one is watching you.
I've watched a thousand leaves fall, each from its own place,
And every one reminded me of a time I slammed the pane in your face.
The autumn winds carry understanding; you must have had enough.
So, why are you back beneath my feet, asking if you can come up?
Climb up these branches, and think of me as you do.
It's not far to my window, and I'm waiting up for you.
Author notes
They're lyrics
Kikai Ni
A contest entry
- Lyricists Only! by WarmHeartedGeisha.
900 points, ended May 9, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - If I gave you a box of crayons, would you color me happy? by Breezie.
450 points, ended May 14, 2008, 22 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Was it too same-old, same-old to be interesting?
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This is beautiful!! I loved it! It is such a story of love and heartache and life and forgiveness....wow. That's about all I can say...wow! Great imagery! Good job and best of luck in the contest!!
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I'm glad you liked it so much. I like it, myself, but I'm pleased you enjoyed it, as well. You phrased it quite well; love, heartache, life, forgiveness.
Thank you so very much.
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Very nice! I am quite satisfied with the work you've done with this title!
The style has a different feel than what I am used to, and I like it. Fresh. Nicely done.
Blessings,
C
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"Fresh," that's a nice way to put it ^^
It's not my best work, but I'm glad to have not disappointed you. I had the scene in my head and tried to write it in the least boring way I could.
I am glad to receive your praise.
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This is amazing! And the title really caught my attention. Very very well done!
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Thank You
Actually, Demington gave me the title and challenged me to write a poem with it. I'm glad you're satisfied ^^ -
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Well u have writen gold!
And thank u 4 putting PART 2 in ur notes, that helps my forgetful teenage mind
~Lorissa~
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