Locked inside my heart
unshed tears were stowed
cringing in the darkness
a hostage deep below
Years they have been hidden
afraid to see the light
others might make fun
so they keep way out of sight
Until a stranger did appear
with kindness in their heart
they gave me love and shelter
today the healing starts
My eyes began to flow
the tears were free at last
darkness turned to light
my future drown out the past
Author notes
This "was" about me
A contest entry
- What's The Story Behind The Tears :: Picture Prompt by Xox ILY xoX.
525 points, ended April 30, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~You through Me~ by Mezclita.
800 points, ended May 1, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I'm guessing you chose "unfrozen"? Either way, a sweet write that explains how one can cry when happy too! Thanx 4 it n TC<3 Alex
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Thanks for your comments.
Sorry I didn't put in my notes what I chose...it was "still hope" That no matter how hard your life might be that there is still hope if one person cares.
You are right about the tears being tears of joy...so my poem could have fit with "unfrozen" also...cause at last she could cry her tears of joy!
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lol... sure no prob.! I had actually meant for the 'still' in "still hope" to be an adjective describing what kind of hope, not as an adverb saying that hope still exists... but I guess my interpretation was too abstract because nobody caught it and about all three entries that had to do with it took it your way~ anyway, thank u for taking the time to explain^^
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this is the feeling of many people....it is a luck to get somebody's help to heal ourselves of the pain ...brought out very well by your words...
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Excellent write from the heart
Yes so often one person can bring light back to another and this world should never leave ones alone to fear . We all have our guardean angels its just some cant see what is before them . I am so pleased to know you found yours and have healed
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Wow, I can certainly follow the smooth rhythm to this poem. You expressed it very well, and captured the idea of what I think ... was the ability to cry away the past and look to the future and healing of the hurting. If this wasn't what you were aiming for, I apologize. But it's still a good message either way. There's one small thing I'd change, but if you don't want to that's perfectly fine. I hate it when people make suggestions that I don't like, too. Lol. But uh, the last line in the second stanza moves the rhythm a little off. I think it might sound a little better without the word 'way' in there. Read it to yourself and see if it works out. If not, that's fine. It was a very amazing write. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Thanks
Thanks for such a kind review. I'm so glad you got the meaning behind what I was saying. I thought after looking at these pictures I seen hope as a possible future for these beautiful children...I know I recieved kindness even when I gave up on hope. So I think never give up!! Thanks again and I will check your work out.
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This is a great write and tell so much in so few words wonderful! I think you have a typo in darkness, you may want to fix but this poem is wonderful! I am also a night owl there are a few us on here that are up late
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Hoo! Hoo! Means thanks for reviewing my work. Yes, I did have a typo on "darkness" thanks so much for bringing it to my attention! Being a night owl is not so bad too me anymore...I get all the things that is running around in my head out. You got to do something with them or they will drive you crazy! lol
Oh! hope you find the perfect name for your cat. I had a stray dog someone just dropped off and I took her in (didn't know it was a her) she had 6 puppies under our house!! They were so cute but we found homes for them.
Write On!!!!
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