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Vanilla Dreams

 
 

 
 
Under your spell of delicate slumber
Delicious visions of future untold
These splendours and enchantments encumber
within delicious dreaming - time unfolds 
 
Such delights take form within sleeping mind
luring out into open oasis 
Vanilla kisses bestowed - passing time
Within one world - many scrumptious places 
 
The scent of adventure tantalizes
The feel of your love tickles every sense
From dreaming, reality now rises
 Excitement unravels from the suspense
 
Awaken within the morning lights shine
Happiness found upon pillow of mine 

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  • NeonRose
    May 3, 2008
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    Beautifully done, and well deserving of the Silver. Congratulations,


  • B Chandler
    May 3, 2008
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    Commentary

    In reply to Celticmoon's question, this is indeed a sonnet very and nicely well executed. But what's so appealing about this is that the end rhymes are not forced which sometimes have a tendency to get that feeling. Other from that, my agreeance is with Bel on this


  • Celticmoon
    May 3, 2008
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    The form is lovely, a sonnet, yes? And the flow of this piece is smooth, soft, tender and gentle. The words slip from the lip when reading in a hushed fashion that lingers in the mind still. This is stunning! Thank you for entering. Best of luck to you.

    PS

    Give my grandson a and for me
    Love you bunches hunny!


    Mum


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    April 14, 2008

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    Just smiles hun!
    Lovely smooth write

    Best of luck
    ♥
    Stay safe
    Love you
    ~Manda