I missed you
You left me lying there, broken, bruised
I don't know why
You stormed in, tension flying around you
And let yourself think what was not real
Only you believe it
Even though it's not true
Those bloody tears that fell from my cheek
That you did not wipe away
Instead you made more for me to cry
You stole my heart
And broke it
You thought it was the other way
But I didn't break your heart
I wouldn't leave you, I just wouldn't
But you left me
When you knew I was in pain
Why?
Author notes
I don't know what this is about...
A contest entry
- What's The Story Behind The Tears :: Picture Prompt by Xox ILY xoX.
525 points, ended April 30, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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i like this it really good
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Hm, I'm not sure I follow this one entirely. It seems like something sort of thrown together. Makes me think you rushed it. If you didn't, I'm sorry for thinking such a thing. It is pretty good, but I think you could've done better. It was similar to a lot of things I hear and it wasn't that unique. Although I have to say my favorite part was the second stanza because it made me think of someone making an assumption about someone they're in a relationship with except it wasn't like that. But the person accusing the other, they'll only listen to their mind and their paranoia about it. Even if it's not what really happened, they still think it is. I've played that role in my relationship before. I'll admit to that, definitely. It was a decent entry, and thank you for entering. Good luck.
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i like it
maybe you could name the poem
MISSING YOU BUT ALL IN VAIN
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