He was the sunshine of my life
He brightened up my day
I never wanted anyone as much
And I’d never felt that way
He was the one who made me smile
Who made it all seem real
He took away the pain
And taught me how to feel
I loved him more than words
Could somehow ever describe
Nor can they explain
The amount of tears I’ve cried
For every ray of sunshine
There’s a counterpart; the night
And there’s always dark clouds
To cover any trace of light
For as happy as he made me
We learn that all things turn
And after a while we realise
That even sunshine burns
Author notes
this was written about my ex... i called him sunshine...i know its kinda lame and cliche, but the words i used are from an old poem that i wrote him, only this time turned around in the negative
so yeah, i know its cliche and kinda crap, but please dont judge too harshly!
What did you think
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Excellent
Well I am sorry to say but this poem is not at all crap. Your poem is amazing and nothing is lame about it in my view. We all are sunshine of someone's life so its really lovely poem.
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Cliche? Yes. Crap? Absolutely not! The rhyme and flow and structure were good to me. And something I tell a lot of people, your emotions on paper, whether you call it poetry or not, is Poetry!
'For as happy as he made me
We learn that all things turn
And after a while we realise
That even sunshine burns'
This is my favorite part. I can not tell you how many 'Sun burns' I have had over the length of my life. Some deeper and more poisonous than others, but they all hurt just the same. Well penned, you are a good writer!
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I found this poem heart felt and it is how you felt. I really did love reading this as in a way in some part of our lifes we all feel like that and the last stanza
For as happy as he made me
We learn that all things turn
And after a while we realize
That even sunshine burns.
Brilliant end to a great piece of writing.
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