A luminous path leads from the lagoon,
across the ocean, to the rising moon.
Leahi lies to the left, jutting out;
usurping the haughty horizon’s clout.
On eve’nings, like this, as we stroll the strand,
romance, more conspicuous than the sand,
stirs the same raw instinct as grunions, beached,
and fans the fire of passion, unleashed.
This morning’s rain conjured fears we were benched;
beach towels on lawn chairs were thoroughly drenched.
We pardoned Kamapua his treason
when, with haste, he restored tourist season.
And if tonight were as wet and moonless
as most Hawaiian meles are tuneless,
no stormy weather could be as humbling
as these echoes inside, deep and rumbling.
Author notes
This poem was written (elsewhere) for a writing prompt to rhyme: unleashed, drenched, season, moonless and rumbling.
Leahi is the Hawaiian name for the famous Diamond Head volcano. Grunions are fish that, once a year, beach themselves to mate. Kamapua is a Hawaiian rain god. Hawaiian meles are the rythmic drum music that hula dancers often perform to.
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Comments
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This is a lovely poem I have seen pictures of the volcano there and it is just amazing. Thank you for entering the contest and good luck.
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This is a beautiful poem. Well written and diction is great. It flows and rhymes beautifully. Gook luck in the contest.
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This poem was very well written. Thanks for adding in the extra info in the authors notes and thanks for your entry
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