There is a place I go
it's all my own
to share with others
or be all alone
A world where I do
everything that is fun
to live in awhile
from my troubles I run
Can be anyone I want
a "second life" to live
man,woman or animal
it's alright to fib
To stay till my life ends
I would gladly do
but I have to remember
to spend time with you
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Very nicely written, I can identify with this -
I'm sure that we all have our own 'places' that we disappear to inside of ourselves when we went to escape "normal" life and get away from the world to recover, or just even relax!
Nice job - I think that a lot of readers will be able to relate to this!
thanks for entering
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Thanks much
I wrote this for my husband cause although it's alright to escape for awhile you can't forget the real world.
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Very nice. I love it. I can totally relate to it. One can sign out of reality and sign into their "second life", their own world.
"To stay till my life ends
I would gladly do
but I have to remember
to spend time with you"
Keep writing and good luck in the contest. -
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Thanks much for the read and comment! Glad u enjoyed it and could relate...this was wrote to my husband who spends WAY to much time on his games!
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How true to life this is. The narrator can run anywhere, be anything as poetic writting dances the reader from stanza to stanza. This is concise and the flow is smooth. Nice read.
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Thanks much for your nice comment
darlintlc
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Haha, this was a really good poem. I like it. I can totally relate to this poem because I have a place where I can go just to get away from everyone and to think about my life or day or whatever.
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Thanks for commenting yes it is nice to get away for awhile as long as we remember to come back to RL
Thanks again
darlintlc
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very good poem. and a lot of people like to run from the real world a lot. i personally do that with books, but that is because i am a book worm as well. lol. again, very good job, and you did good with the rhyme as well
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Thanks for your comment...I too escape in reading also!
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Interesting, It is so true, that so many people run from their real lives to the interweb - playing off a totally different persona, or maybe even two or three.. It is sad, that they are missing out on the real world around them
The real people around them... Life. ya know?
Great write! I really liked this, it is very true and has great meaning
Amber
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Thanks for commenting on "Sign In...Sign Out" This poem was wrote to show people that hiding from RL "all" the time is not "living" Thanks for understanding what I was getting across.
darlintlc
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I liked it nice rythmn.
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The ending made this work for me, mostly, I guess because it was romantic. I liked the piece overall. It reminds me a little of the song: Up On the Roof. We all need our space, yet, we all need our love, too. Nicely done.
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Thanks so much!!
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you have shared the depth of your heart and that depth is indeed amazing my friend..well done...I love it..and my thanks for such a wonderful piece...
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Thanks for reading. This poem was wrote for my husband and all the others who spend their lives on games like "second life"
darlintlc
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i know what you're saying. this reminds me of some of my old stuff. this is just me, but the short lines and simple rhyme made it seem a bit simplistic to me. but still, it's a nice piece.
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Thanks for reading and commenting. Some poems are meant to be understood...therefor "simplistic" is just what I want to write. But that's just me!!
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Heh. This piece brings back some very personal memories. I'm not sure why but it's as if reading this has taken me back to my very own 'special place' that I once had. Thank you for that. And thank you for sharing. Well done.
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What a very great write you have wonderfully created. I like it. I'm sure so many wish they could have a place to run away to and just do and be whatever they wish. No one I know realy comes to mind when I read this though. But still, none the less this was an excellent piece. keep the pen flowing, you've realy got some tallent.
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This flows well. The rhyming is good and seems to fit nicely.
It is nice to have a place to escape to from life's pressures, but oh how tempting it can be to live our lives there.
I like how you bring it back to reality in that last stanza:
"To stay till my life ends
I would gladly do
but I have to remember
to spend time with you"
There are people in our lives who need us.
I also like the title. I think it really fits with the idea that you are putting forth here.
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Thanks for commenting on "Sign In...Sign Out" so glad you understood my poem! It was wrote for my husband who started playing "second life" and made it his "only life" lol!! Yes it is nice to escape but...not to live in a world that is not real and forget your real life and those living there!!
Therefore the title, "Sign In (but don't forget to) Sign Out"
Thanks for reading
darlintlc
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Oh, dear...I hope he got the message! Real life people can be so much more fun and those relationships are truly rewarding!
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wouldn't that be great if we all had a place like this? this was well penned, with your use of imagination and thoughts of having a place to run to
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