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Amera from AP ....... RIP.
A resident of this planet known as earth,
full of fun, mischief and unending mirth.
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Candle on fire both ends at any one time,
writing cute poems with a rhythmic rhyme,
big heart of gold under large heaving bust,
when writing A.O. poems with endless lust.
Her frantic flight down to the gates of hell,
while taking her lover for the ride as well,
set Satan alight with that sizzling episode,
and he worried if Hell was about to explode.
But now she rests in a cool peaceful place,
such a smile of serenity on a beautiful face.
So when gazing down from up there above,
we hope she receives our messages of love.
.Epitath for Amera.
A contest entry
- Write an Epitaph by Amera.
1000 points, ended April 14, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful, yet sad and lonely...
Chilling is the mood and I had to stop as I blinked and choked, is she - gone?!!?
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aww... you're so sweet
Thank you for entering and thank you for the lovely sentiments.
Love,
Amera♥
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This is such an amazing write. I loved the rhyme and flow of this as well as the humour. All the best for the contest.
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For one awful moment I thought you had killed my sister!
Nice piece of work. The only thing I don't like about it is one tiny split infinitive, but that's just me being finicky.
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Finicky infinitive = expletive ?
Mairi I have no idea what a split infinitive is so I rewrote it getting rid of a few hickups just to please YOU and in the possibility I fixed it. Normally these are just off the cuff and I dont spend much time on them but they give a bit of a challenge and some fun don't they.??
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"to almost explode" is a split infinitive. The word "almost" is in between the two halves of the infinitive "to explode". Grammatical opinion is divided between people who don't give a damn (like Captain James T Kirk on the Starship Enterprise), people like me (who think they are ugly constructions and can sometimes cause ambiguity in a sentence), and also a minority of people who think you definitely should split an infinitive with an identifiable adverb. You pays your money and you takes your choice. My preference is that if I am heading for an unattractive figure of speech, I find another way of saying it.
Anyhow no worries because this is such a nice poem anyway, so who cares what I think about three words?
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This was very well written but eerie at the same time.
Glad that you are feeling better and back to writing.
Much love
Soulful Woman
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