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Turning Broken

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Sorrow,
 

        danced

through:

pains

    and

         aces


reviving the spirit
of a lonely soul.

By rejection within
[injected to grief]
as nature called forth,

     the beating of hearts.

And wings did try
to gently,
             lift;
sweeping taunts
   and memoirs

  from
cascading tears.

As God
told the angels
[to rest her in peace]


sprinkling,

         roses
on her ruins

 

      [she inhaled

          into nothing]

Whisking through remains
of loves' buried hopes

a final exhalation
      and a deadly,

           

                 release.

 

[she let go]

Author notes

pic credit:http://princess-of-shadows.deviantart.com/art/we-are-two-no-more-just-one-51753429

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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    May 10, 2008
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    I love the formatting and this is a wonderful, haunting piece. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.


    whisper


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    April 26, 2008
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    I love that artist!

    Nicely done here.


  • Unsigned gold member
    April 16, 2008

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    As my shapeshifting Tiger below said Steff, absoloutely amazing...you really are a talented and gifted writer..and I am you biggest fan as always..

    Your protective Lion

    Simon

  • Nighttime angel
    April 16, 2008

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    wow this is absolutely amazing. I love this one so much. I am in awe of this.. you did an amazing job with this prompt. excellent poem. yep I am pretty much speechless.

    good luck & thank you for entering

    kat


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    April 13, 2008

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    I picked this one too! best of luck, I can't wait to read what you come up with!


    whisper

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