You're such a cruel woman but I want you
Your touch is cool, woman but I want you
You open up my eyes and I soon realise
I'm just a fool, woman but I love you
So give me all you've got to give
A man needs more pain so he can live
I'm not your first lover under the covers
Just one of many and maybe just another
So open your eyes and realise
I'll take what you can give me like any other
I'm going play your games if you want me to
One way or another I'm going get to you
Because
When you lie down with dogs you'll get up with fleas
You can gnaw at a bone when you're down on your knees
You'll scratch and you'll itch that no cream can ease
When you lie down with dogs you'll catch their disease
So don't you find yourself another lover
I'm here to stay so you won't have any other
Open up your eyes and you'll soon realise
Honey is sweet on your tongue like a new lover
So give me all you have to give
A man needs more pain so he can live
Because
When you lie down with dogs you'll get up with fleas
You can gnaw at a bone when you're down on your knees
You'll scratch and you'll itch that no cream can ease
When you lie down with dogs you'll catch their disease
A contest entry
- POINTS- Easy Entries by NickelleteXninja.
600 points, ended July 8, 2008, 45 entries
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Comments
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Wow, I love the flow and rhyme of this poem. It is absolutely wonderful. and I really like the last stanza, it is very clever. A very nice poem! Thank you for entering!
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"Because
When you lie down with dogs you'll get up with fleas
You can gnaw at a bone when you're down on your knees
You'll scratch and you'll itch that no cream can ease
When you lie down with dogs you'll catch their disease"
Brilliant, I love how that is used more than once.
I like the piece, it is creative.
Best of luck in my contest!
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Excellent use of words =] Your rhyming was quite fantastic as well. Stunning write, great job. Thank you for the entry.
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So give me all you've got to give
A man needs more pain so he can live
Because
When you lie down with dogs you'll get up with fleas
I LOVED IT
amazing tahnks so much for entering I am so speechless right now
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