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As the crows fly,

so do I

Across the watery chasm
of your turgid mind,

do I find
the roar

of raging thoughts.

falling

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  • Nighttime angel
    April 15, 2008

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    this is a very thought provoking poem. one that will keep the reader pondering for a bit. I love these types of poems. you did an outstanding job on the prompt.

    good luck

    kat


  • Perception
    April 13, 2008

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    Hm... Very interestingly written. I love this play on water, and his mind... It really does make you think... What does she really mean... But, then, I just end up thinking what I want to think.... And I think it's best left that way.

    Wonderfully done...


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    April 13, 2008
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    Good write.