You left me all alone,
The wind raging by,
All because, you didn't want me,
God knows how hard I've tried,
To impress you,
Even though you aren't here
I cry at night,
Because you left me,
These emotional scars,
Presented at birth,
No comforting words,
For a daughters tears.
Nothing to quell,
All of the abandonment fears.
You never called,
Not even once,
Hardly even saw me,
How can you leave me?
Not even knowing,
The person I am,
The person I could be
Damn these scars you left me,
Damn your insecurity,
Damn the pain you gave me,
like a birthday present.
Happy fucking birthday to me.
You hated me,
For being a girl,
Now I can not stand,
The girl I see in the mirror,
The person I have become,
All because of these scars you left me.
Author notes
Option : 21. Daddy’s girl
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WOW!
So much truth can come out when your heart speaks for you, Realy good I love it. -
Damn these scars you left me,
Damn your insecurity,
Damn the pain you gave me,
like a birthday present.
Happy fucking birthday to me.
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Thanks. I was really mad when I wrote this, I got tired of feeling that I was worthless because he left me. I am getting over it now, one small step at a time.
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This is a great poem and one I can really relate to. Everyone always tells me someday I'll get over it but I don't think you ever really do.
Great write!!!
Hugs!
Cayla
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wow that is a great sad peice and i loved it very full of emotion....
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Thank you, this poem was the beginning of me getting over it.
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Very sad piece and very emotionally touching. Thanks for the great entry. Hugs, Bunny
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So sad but very touching. A very good write. good luck.
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Thank you.
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this poem really made me think
sad but moving at the same time
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Once again thank you.
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Great Job... I can defenitly relate to this. I like the way you wrote it and the message came across clear. Great job.
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Thank you, I had a hard time typing this one. I felt like this was too personal for cyberspace, but then realized, that if I make an excuse for not showing this then why should I tell my friends?
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this poem just tore my heart in two p.p -
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Thanks, it was what this poem was meant to do. It was also me just shedding the walls I have worn for years.
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awful
that makes me sadder but u really outdid ureself with this poem welcoem to the finals =) lol -
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Thanks so much!
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So much raw emotion radiating from your words. So much pain and anguish. I'm sincerely sorry if this is a true story. You're very expressive and frank, and I admire that. Thanks for entering.
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Yes it is a true story, my mom called from the hospital when I was born to tell my biological dad that I was a girl (They could not find out cause I kept my legs crossed.) He cussed her out on the phone, hung up, and my mom left him.
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This poem holds a lot of emotion in the lines, and that's powerful. I really loved the easy flow it had, with slight images and a lot of feelings, and the rhymes were very nice =D A lot of anger, but a lot of pain shows through that anger.
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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Thank you. I wrote this a couple of weeks back, due to the fact that my mom was talking to my sister about her own dad, and I just felt so down. I felt so lost before I wrote this, like I did not have a foot hold. Thank you once again for commenting.
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Wow Kari if I would have known that I would have tried to comfort you or something. That is just horrible that your own father left you and your mother just because you were a girl and not a boy. For all he knows one day you might become a musical legend or a story or poem legend for all the he knows. My dad can be mean at times but he would never do something like that. Did your mom tell you that just to hurt you or did you find out someway on your own or did your older sis tell you. Give me a message when you get on to tell me about it. I will talk to you later.
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Thank you to everyone who has commented, I am 93 points from meeting my 300 goal. I hate my biological dad, never want to see him. I am so messed up right now due to this. I mean, I think any thought of anything feminine is a sign of weakness. I constantly second guess my worth, in anything. I have started to change this, but it is a hard path to walk. I am sorry for all of you who have felt this pain. I wish you luck in finding your own happiness, or some sense of belonging.
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Wow, I know the pain. Execpt it was from my own mother. She is still around though. That's the bad part. She always hit me and abunch of other stuff. I know the emotion and can feel it in this poem. I'm glad you entered this. Oh yeah, my favorite lines are, "Like a birthday present./ Happy fucking birthday to me." I loved this poem. I wish you the best of luck in this contest.
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This is completely like where I am! I still live with my father, but he makes it VERY clear everyday that I am dead to him! I am worthless, hopeless, never get anything right! I am just awed at the fact that this is like what I would write!
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Great Job! I totally understand. Nicely written!!!
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First thing I would like to say is that I totally understand this. Never had my father around. Just something I learned to live with. I see it as he is missing out and its his loss, but I know I missed out and lost out on a lot of things. This piece was very emotional and well written. I like it a lot. Good luck in the contest.
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Thanks. My dad left out on my family when I was born, said he could not stand the fact that I was a girl, and that he would never raise anything that weak. I have emotional issues now, one of them being that I am an uber tomboy, and I have trouble relating to girls because of this. I am more comfortable with guys, and I try to hide behind this whole macho attitude. The scars will never really heal, just slightly fade.
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