Ring around the rosies,
Pocket full of posies,
Ashes, Ashes,
We all fall down,
And around and around we go,
So fast that to world slows,
Children glowing white,
Causing terrible fright,
Spinning and laughing,
As day fades to night,
Their story is constantly told,
As their personal biographies unfold,
Weakened by death,
The most uncomfortable rest,
Strange as it seems,
You watch them,
Captivated by their anthem,
You find yourself wanting to play,
And all your fears seem to fade,
Ring around the rosies,
Can you hear it?
Pocket full of posies,
Can you feel it?
Ashes, Ashes,
Is it getting louder?
We all fall down,
And into the ground,
You go
Another child missing,
All because they were simply listening,
To the story of the chilrens' graves,
Taking souls...of the brave,
And we all fall down.
Author notes
I went with Option seven because it's something I haven't done before. Here's to your contest Nooni.
A contest entry
- Heaps of Options!! by NooNiThEWitcH.
430 points, ended June 8, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Come on, be honest.
Comments
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I don't play ring around the rosies, but I do fall down a lot.
I like the last line... 
Actually, I liked this part.
"Ring around the rosies,
Can you hear it?
Pocket full of posies,
Can you feel it?
Ashes, Ashes,
Is it getting louder?
We all fall down,
And into the ground,
You go"
I like how you could take the part of that song, and put extra words between the lines. I like this poem.
-Alien
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posies
How did I not see this mayne?? Loved it... awesome theme and twisted just right... GRAND.
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CREATIVE BUT WEIRD!
This - I must say - is ECCENTRIC!!!
It is definitely not what I expected for this option. VERY CREATIVE!
Interesting.. I like how you used part of the children's rhyme in your poem.
Thank you for entering my contest and I hope you enter again. The contest has been extended anyway..
Keep on writing and good luck.
Nooni
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