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Just a Dream

The tears drip down my face as I am
with you in another time another place
The joy fills my soul again my life is whole again
You are here with me alive in my memory


The scene is set a time I cant forget
So young and fun the games begun excited and surprised
I see the delight in your eyes I feel the pleasure
The childhood joy is a treasure I cant forget


So real so true my child oh how I miss you
I taste the time I sense the scene no better time there has ever been
One that will never come again now all I have left is this never ending pain
Just one moment of joy as I am there once more


A loss so pure and so unfair my child now you're not there
Forever until the end of time you will be on my mind

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  • sensualbutterfly
    October 19, 2008

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    A truly emotionally sad piece. Another time, another place. Flowed smoothly. Beautiful write. Thank you for the entry


  • petalblue2
    October 18, 2008

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    Wonderful wording. Your language truly portrays your emotion. A very sad piece But a lovely write indeed.


  • MrsJones
    June 23, 2008
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    Beautiful piece, I really enjoyed reading this. It shows real emotion, thank you for entering.


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    April 26, 2008

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    I love this piece, the flow just carries you along. In your second to last line, it should be "you're" instead of your. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.


    whisper


  • GypsyEyes
    April 13, 2008

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    the first two lines are fantastic and the rest of the poem flows smoothly. thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! NineTailedFox

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