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My Tragedy.

I've been waiting for that moment.
The one where the Earth stops turning,
When your heart stops beating and when you can tell in an instant,
your life has been changed forever.
I've been sayin to myself it just around the bend.
It's right down this hall or it's got to be soon.

Then it happened...

I'd been holdin my breath for so long I was goin blue.
I was about to give up and just slip away.
I'd forgotten why I wanted it.
Why I needed that instant,
why I'd hoped and prayed for that one given second.

To feel love like I had never known...

I'd been chewed and spit out, abused and neglected.
Then I felt feelings I thought not existed.
She gave me her hand and I anxiously took it.
Unaware of the consequences, oblivious to the wreckage.

Now...

The debris falls like rain in this city of corpses.
What once was a palace lies buried in ashes.
I stand here enslaved to her lustfull passion,
I can't leave her side, I can not abandon her.

Her heart beckons to me,
Like mobs of fallen angels begging for lost redemtions.
And though I know if I cower from her side,
My life may piece back together as it were.
I fear that's not what I long for.

I long to shower my self in this soot covered wreckage.
To bask in this chivalrous downfall that surrounds us.
And look into those luscious brown eyes that have brought this upon me.
And hold no regret for anything done.

No...

For I care not that my kingdom lies in shambles,
I care not that our love has lead us to battles.
I only care that we have overcome towering seiges.
We have broken down barriers and walked the highest trapezes.

For we have prevailed in any case,
and like the weaving branches of the willows among us,
Our hands triumph still entwined.
And though we are bruised, battered, and torn,
our hearts remain one and somehow untouched.

For this is the moment I'd long waited for.
My life has altered in so many ways,
and I have direction with her by my side.
I took her hand just as I clench it now
As we wander through the rubble tumbling upon us.
It descends around us,
like the cascading waters of the falls of lush green jungles,
Leading us through passages of our rudimentary paradise.

The eden that surrounds us now freshly fallen at our feet,
was once full of treasures whose bounty held no limits.

I was not a treasure...

I was merely a pigeon perched high on the fortress ledge.
But she... she saw my potential.
Saw the encryptions I carried in my beak,
And bestowed upon me a courage I'd not yet found.

One by one I tore down the walls,
of the utopia that once encompassed me.
And they scattered among the fields,
like waves of sprouting dandelions,
Each falling flawlessly in it's place without effort.

And it wasn't till now, in this moment in which I speak,
that I'd understood what I had done for her and I.
And though you may call it a cataclysm or tragedy,
I find you are most certainly mistaken.

My tragedy...

Tragedies end in fallen heroes who know not who to blame.
I know who is at fault, but there's no one in the wrong.
For though I have lost my palace, my kingdom,
My downfall can not be considered concluded.

Yes...

Though I know not where this meandering pathway shall lead me,
I know who it is that has saved me from myself,
And shall walk with me,
Through this graveyard of memories soon to made...





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Riley J.

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Comments

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  • Falcon SilverWolf
    June 6, 2008

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    you have wonderful deatail and though your peom is long it does not deture from the beauty of the words and holds your attentio


  • Erozay
    May 8, 2008
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    p.p i liked it


  • BlackSwan
    May 2, 2008

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    MOVING!!! this poem sent me through a rush of many emotions. Though i must say incredible wording.

    i loved it

    -thank you for your entry

  • celadia
    April 22, 2008
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    Long and lovely.


  • Cat10
    April 20, 2008

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    thanks for entering, sorry I have no critism! only praise! I really enjoyed reading this piece! you did a wonderful job! good luck in this and all of your other contests!


  • broken-colours
    April 19, 2008

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    "The eden that surrounds us now freshly fallen at our feet,
    was once full of treasures whose bounty held no limits."

    Criticism? Um, where is that, anyway? I don't think I could have anything but praise for this beautifully penned poem. It has an array of different feelings coupled with creative and suitable words. What more could you ask for? Brilliant poem, thanks for entering, and good luck!

  • Tecohe
    April 17, 2008

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    The sound of sacrifice and chivalry

    The height you describe attaining is balanced by the devastation and she cannot be the enemy in our eyes for you hold her in high esteem.
    One must defer to anyone who takes a pigeon and now has a kingdom-even one that is destroyed.
    Tecohe


  • Survivingbychance
    April 13, 2008

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    Wow this is very insightful. I love your word choice and how you get your, I guess sonnet?, across. It's almost like something Shakespearean, but I love it. It's really good, though, really long! I like it!

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