Oh to wake on a dreamless night!
with destiny undecided
thirsting for easy answers, floating
in a water glass beside my bed,
when crying into my pillow
is just not enough, and I need to run,
so I follow my feelings, swing open the door
and slide into a cloudless sky
wishing it was rain that filled these wet palms
falling hard upon this Earth,
spilling my woes upon the grass
feeding dandelions bleeding yellow
the nectar of my fleeting memories
but when its all said and done
I only have one life
and one heart beating red
that is meant to flutter...~
♥♥
~
Author notes
Word Bank Bonanza: Use all words in any form.
Swing, Slide, Run, Grass, Dandelion, Wet, Hard, Earth, Undecided, Cloudless, Rain, Red, Palms, Yellow
A contest entry
- A Muse's Playground by Randomly Beautiful.
300 points, ended April 20, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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An excellent piece of descriptive emotion. A beautiful sadness, blooming a certain hope. Great use of imagery throughout. This is such a truly powerful write, wonderfully penned!
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I love the allusions in this piece, from the "floating in a water glas beside my bed" to "feeding dandelions bleeding yellow" .. outstanding dear sis, pure emotional poetry.
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Yowza!
what a poem you have penned here. very well penned & sheer quality that really impressed me alot. I cna relate to how you used the glass of water & crying into the pillow as I am always strugglin with that lately *sigh* any ways wonderful work & keep up the very good work n good luck
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I like the way you have weaved the words into a personal and beautiful piece that speaks to the reader's heart. ~Jim
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oh my friend, your words mean so much and it is so wonderful to see you
love and hugs 
Lynda
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As always a very beautiful and most touching poem to the heart!! So much sadness, yearning to feel the love we all wish we dreamed of that could flutter our hearts eternally!
Sigh~ I wish you all the best in the contest Sis
Jazzy
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Beautiful but sad ....so much emotion in this...this is so full of yearning.....I think we all crave someone that we can just escape into, without fear of hurt....
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Such beauty in your bath of sorrow, and a true mirror of our poetic dilemma...still so full of freedom in feather...and lovely as well...wonderful angel poet
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wonderful imagery you have etched upon the screen from that word bank, your precious soft spirit comes shining through in yet another piece of wondrous poetic thought. well done and best wishes in the contest.
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You catch the feeling of aloneness that just seeks another presence, not as an answer, but just a space
that can share and understand what the heart wants to unfold. You reflect the strength and tenderness of an artist who knows all to well a world that rushes past to quickly, a world that needs to stop hear the wind, feel the kiss of a child, and just once in its life be touched by love that comes without question, without regret -- just, to keep you company. Beautifuly done.
Love, Tom B.
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