Bravely Sir,
you fought!
For;
Life,
Liberty,
Justice.
For you;
A prime nut!
Author notes
First Haiku I've done.
Supposed to be kind of silly.
Like the
'Why do people like pirates?' 'Because they are ARRRsome!'
Also:
This isn't the 'wrong way' to do a haiku.
It is still in three different sections, all with the right rhythm. Remember: There are always more then a few ways to peel an apple.
Mistakes? Improvements that need to be made? Tips and tricks? I'd like some advice please.
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I thought this was fine like it was even though I did not understand the last line, I feel that's my fault
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Heh, well, this was made for a picture prompt contest. The picture was a squirrel in a soldiers uniform, handing a medal to a human hand. Totally understandable that you don't get the last line! Still, glad you liked it!
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If this is a haiku, the form isn't correct. It is suppose to be only three lines. Still, I did enjoy the read. Thank you for sharing.
Kelli -
Very interesting way of penning a haiku - I have never seen someone pen it this way before. You're very creative
But, I like the poem. it's very cute, and nicely done
Good luck in your contest...
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This sure is funny and apposite. I would prefer the 5,7,5 syllables in just three lines but this makes no difference to your quality.
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Aha, thank you! I appreciate the comment and the compliment!
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Yes, I like it... 'a prime nut!' indeed. clever 'write', Sol
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Thank you very much for the applause! I was hoping it would be at least a bit humorous, if only a tiny bit corny. :3
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