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her tongue swirls out
a wisp of smoke curled
round the edge of taste
where at the rim of flavor
chocolate drumstick ice cream
dances nimble courtship
and periodically slides in
through lush brown seals that
close round the shivering tip
of double dark suggestion

 

 

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  • zigdaddy silver member
    May 18
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    fabulously sensual...well-constructed product...bravo

  • Molassis
    May 4

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    It's been a long time since I've read your words... I have missed them.

    I am always amazed when I read your poetry Zahhar. Your word usage is always proper and correct but you use those words to weave even something as simple as eating ice cream into something amazing.

    I guess I would label this piece 'fantasy' even though it's about something 'real' simply because of the way you describe the experience...

    While you are describing a very simple thing... it is clear that you took your time writing about it and captured every little thing right down to "a wisp of smoke". You don't miss a thing!!!

    Excellent poetry Zahhar. I am amazed at your talent.

    ~Melissa


  • MariGoes gold member
    April 13
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    Yes, you were right


  • Perception
    April 13

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    ooo... hehe... wonderful... I really love your descriptions --- wonderful...

    Great read... you held my attention all the way through