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Mistakes

My mind was
locked in a state
where I could handle,
                         impurity

because to me
it didn't exist;

but,

 

I let you in:

  hope's to feel
    that my heart
       would revive

and I
could feel,
           real.

but

these tears never dried
    like a storm
       it never ends;


lightening
      strikes
leaving ash scented,

                  memoirs
[of once upon a time
when I was numb]


and I couldn't feel,

 

my greatest mistake.

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  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    April 13, 2008

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    My little volcano of emotion, yet so tender and sweet.
    Best of luck in the contest Stephanie.


    Love and peace always,
    mj.


  • Blooming Poet
    April 12, 2008
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    Very interesting form. I really like it. so much intense pain and emotion. Beautiful take.