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Longevity Thy Mistress

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Sonnet LXX

Longevity My Mistress Pt i


Let it be known that naissance is of late
significant that this longevity
shall live as long as these words shall donate
Affairs of the heart in their brevity,
Not a thought nor a whim should a thief
though if renditions are morbid as bleak
fully aware that due to mere relief;
in as much that if as old as antique
Thou hast with heart in this old oak of thine.
Lest not we forget the marriage of will,
though it is fixt that the next birth of time
should the shroud of an existence so thrill.
Could those legions who've augmented claim
Mediocrity, forsakens his name.
 

 

 


Sonnet LXXI

Longevity my Mistress Pt ii

 


Thou hast paraphrased a psalm though as a chime
which has altered this, the scenery as such
therefore proceeding with his life and time
Can bring, so it appears, a Shakespeare touch
his versions up till now have been bestowed,
though this upon suspicion how we grieve
protected by the way we read each ode
Like any mistress decoy, should she leave.
That death be the upheaval from this urge
of beneficials openly seduced,
For future ventures death within a surge
that loving brought, existence introduced.
Fruition, in that acorns reimburse
The moving apparitions plays rehearse.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

from the prompt, "4. Tomorrow and tomorrow and tomorrow,
Creeps in this petty pace from day to day
To the last syllable of recorded time."

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  • Judith Chandler
    April 26, 2008

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    I enjoyed the Shakespearean feel and language. Nice to get these sonnets.

    Thanks you for your submission.


  • BleedingDeep
    April 14, 2008
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    I love this write1 It's
    great Titus...
    yje sonnet was beautiful and oh so Powerfull


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    April 13, 2008

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    whn one writes in this form and styled with beautification, you have served the poetry world with something worth publishing, hope you do this so nicely written, good luck

    Lin


  • Fulabeans
    April 13, 2008

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    I do not often attempt to read sonets because not very many people can write them very well. That being said...You have a rare gift and I hope that you are going to keep writing and feeding your talent with experience.


  • JinSays gold member
    April 12, 2008

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    It's taken me a full 20 minutes to digest this work enough to comment, mostly because I'm fresh from reading a poem by a seven year old. I've read, digested, comprehend, so here goes:
    There's a reason we are still studying, and performing, works by the Bard. I confess I felt much like Shaw, when it came to Shakespeare. He said that with the single exception of Homer, there is (was) no imminent writer, not even Sir Walter Scott, whom he can despise so entirely, (when he measured his mind against Shakespeare's), that it would be positively a relief to him to dig up his body, just to throw stones at him...

    Of course, that's Shaw for you.
    I no longer feel that way, especially after studying him in my older years. I laugh at my younger impressions, only because I didn't understand. With that in mind, yes, I really enjoyed your work, I'm truly glad I clicked, and I hope you win your contest.
    Jin


  • Peteskid gold member
    April 12, 2008
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    having his example we ought to be able to write this style with even greater impact than the original...but I have never seen it done, this is eloquent and excellent,so very well styled, very much like the way Shakespeare seemed to shape his thoughts in dualisms...so very well done...PK


  • Iridessa MoonFlower
    April 12, 2008

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    My favorite part was "Lest not we forget the marriage of will,
    though it is fixt that the next birth of time
    should the shroud of an existence so thrill"
    Arranged marriages am I right? I think it is so unfair, even if it is other's cultures we all should have the right to chose the one we love. Also Shakespeare was amazing! Your words really touched my heart. I hope I didn't take this wrong. It was really deep! Anyways GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST! In Love & Light... Blessed Be! ~~Iridessa~~


  • Night Hope gold member
    April 12, 2008

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    "That death be the upheaval from this urge
    of beneficials openly seduced"

    I agree with Amera, my Friend. There are no words sufficient to ackowledge your talents. Wanda


  • Amera gold member
    April 12, 2008

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    Wow! I'm speachless! You just blew me away with beauty in poetic art. There aren't enought superlatives to praise your perfect sonnets.

    Love,
    Amera♥

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