You act like you hate me sometimes.
Like I'm a nuisance to you,
In your way of real life.
Like you don't want to be my friend.
And now,
You'll know how it feels to be ignored.
You're gonna regret,
Treating me the way you do,
When we're supposed to be friends.
You'll miss having me there for you.
I have a great friend.
She understands me.
Better than I understand myself.
And she's nicer than you ever were.
She's your friend too.
And the only one,
Who doesn't get annoyed by me,
Being what I have come to be.
Loud, and uncensored.
You'll miss me,
Being there for you.
When you're sad,
And not judging you by your exterior.
You'll regret this act.
And I'll bask,
In the fact,
That you know what you lost.
Call me vindictive.
But I've become unhinged.
And nothing can help.
But sweet revenge.
I'll be gone.
When you least expect.
NOW.
Author notes
c'est la vie. Baisi option 2
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"Call me vindictive.
But I've become unhinged.
And nothing can help.
But sweet revenge."
thats such an awesome way to put things, i like this piece a lot! -
BOLD
I like this piece A LOT. I felt this way for like 2 days straight; just like FUCK HER, I'm better (I've calmed down now lol). A lot in here sticks out that hits home especially regarding the situation I was in;
"You're gonna regret,
Treating me the way you do,
When we're supposed to be friends.
You'll miss having me there for you."
I knew that would have been true since I was nothing but a saint to her. Things change; I have forgiven, but I did feel this way. Such a powerful write and good luck in the contest! Check out my piece too called "Taste"! 8.5/10!
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Hehe
haha that was awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! -
I'll be gone.
When you least expect.
NOW.
LOVING it. I've been there, and done that. And in the end they come to realize that they DID need you. But you don't need people like that in your life, now or ever.
An artistically written piece that leaves the reader both wanting more, and yet feeling utterly satisfied. -
BRILLIANT
Utter Brilliance. I swear the more i read, the more i love. Thank you ever so much for entering my contest. You are quite ontopic and this is an amazing piece.
Easily relatable. The form is immaculate. The words you choose are flawless. Simply wonderful.
"Being what I have come to be.
Loud, and uncensored."
Excuse my language but i FUCKING LOVE THAT! =]
Also,
"Call me vindictive.
But I've become unhinged.
And nothing can help.
But sweet revenge."
That's possibly the greatest quote of all time. -
good luck. i really liked the repetition you used, and i like it in general as well
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woo-hoo, i'm the good friend!
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Good job. Thanks for entering.
Lots of luck to you.
Brian -
"You're gonna regret,
Treating me the way you do,
When we're supposed to be friends.
You'll miss having me there for you."
A very angry poem. This is more about friendship, but sometimes you're friends ARE your life. Lovely write and I hopw the person, if this is true, realizes that they've treated you wrong and find ther err of their ways.
Friends are for now, good friends are for life.
Thanks for entering and good luck!!
jan
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