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James

I look at your body and I see your mind,
From the tips of the frizzy hair to your cute little behind,
I love you.

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This was made for the Contest 'Good things come in threes'. It is about someone dear to me. Also, I did it for the laughs. He'll die when he sees this. Heh.

A contest entry

Mistakes? Improvements that need to be made? Tips and tricks? I'd like some advice please.

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  • EternitysLastWish
    April 13, 2008

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    Aww, I love it! It's so short, sweet and yet so meaningful!

    Nice one, keep up the good work

    God bless,
    ELW x


    • Beide
      April 13, 2008
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      Thank you! Surprisingly, he liked it too! Thank you for the applause!


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    April 13, 2008
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    He's a very lucky man! Sol
    Good luck in contest.


    • Beide
      April 13, 2008
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      Thank you very much! I appreciate that! I'll probably need it too, with such stiff competition!


  • sheltered
    April 12, 2008
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    Being so vain I at first thought this was for me and my sometimes frizzy locks.. lol. Like how you succesfully broke the rhyme.

    • Beide
      April 12, 2008
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      Ahah, thank you. Personally, I thought the last line broke it almost to abruptly, with no rhyming at all.
      Glad to know I at least somewhat pulled it off!

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