As the water gurgles in the brook,
As the birds sing their morning chorus,
I sit and watch my prey,
Watching, waiting to make my move.
The smell of the previous hunts
Still linger in the air.
The smell of blood and entrails,
Making me crave for more.
The rabbit hops closer,
Not knowing whats to come;
Just a little closer,
So I can satisfy my greed.
I leap out of the brush,
Onto that pure-white bunny.
First I bite its neck,
Staining his white fur red.
The familiar smell of a kill,
The delicious coppery taste of blood...
Savouring the meat,
As I bite into its flesh.
The hunger is now gone,
No more yearning to taste the innocent
For now the day is gone,
Until tomorrow again.
Author notes
I was just sitting there, thinking about life and how the food chain works. Then poof! I was writing down this poor bunny's death. Hope you enjoy it!
one-life-to-live-21 is my name. Just call me Emma !!! ^_^
A contest entry
- Unique Poetry by nikkia.
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Comments
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You're the bunny god. With only a wave of your hand you can dictate the life and death of a poor bunny!
I liked this a lot.
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Hahahaha.....I think that I am glad that I didn't read this first!! This actually could be metaphoric for life as well!! Congrats on the shiney....
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I take it...
your a carnivore. hahahaha.... love that blood red irony taste myself. That and spinach has it as well. The iron taste.
good writing keep it up. Ireland huh? Wow your a long way away from where my woods are. Glad you enjoyed my page thanks.
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Well you did well fine beast but what animal were you?
A fox? A great Cat, perhaps a wolf?
Nonetheless you portrayed great hunting skills, and expressed it with great ease in this write.
Well done!
Thankyou for entering this wonderful write in my contest and thankyou for sharing it.
Goodluck to you.
Love and light.
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wow i really enjoyed it. keep it up!
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Thank you for your wonderful dark entry, good luck, Josie
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poor bunny lol...good write...I hate how the food chain works....thanks for entering....
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Enjoy it? You wrote about a rabbit dying emma! It made me think of snow! (bens rabbit)
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the imagery in this poem was great and i thought it read smoothly. thanks for the entry and good luck in the contest
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