The nymphette’s tree is frozen tight in space.
Her barren limbs are caught in dance repose.
Her lonely thoughts are lost on wooden face,
as dryad pines for love that’s lost to snows.
In stand of timber lies a mighty oak.
A daydream, coma's silence belies grace.
The forest spirit stands in nature's cloak
as giant thinks of lover's peaceful face.
Organic lovers lost by winter space.
Oh, sylvan souls so caught in dreaming state,
if roots entwined in timbers' great displace,
these gentle souls shall in their time create,
the growing seed of shining splendor's need
of loves so lost, and now again are freed.
A contest entry
- Nature Heals Contest by kareneisenlord.
1200 points, ended April 27, 2008, 42 entries
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Honorable mention
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Gold trophy winner
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Criticize freely, I need input to improve
Comments
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Classical!
Your poetry reads like the classics of Shakespear and Robert Frost. I love it! Write on!
Blessed Be~
)O(
DragonBlue
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Ah, a good sonnet about perhaps the most worthy of all subjects--a nymph! and a wood nymph no less... very deftly done!!!
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Mmm
I really enjoyed this. I couldn't resist the title, and then I was rewarded with a beautiful sonnet.
"The nymphette’s tree is frozen tight in space.
Her barren limbs are caught in dance repose.
Her lonely thoughts are lost on wooden face,
as dryad pines for love that’s lost to snows."
This first stanza is my favorite. The second line really does something for my imagination, and I love the image that results. Thanks!
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Now this is a sonnet to dance with. I loved the wonderful loneliness of the wood nymph as she mourns the greens of summer and spring. Winter has come, leaving her looking at barren branches and pine groves.
Deep sigh - lover's waiting for spring's rebirth and
it comes; shining and beautiful in the arms of hope.
Excellent work here. I love sonnets.
~Pamela 
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well I shall certainly comment on this one. It's lovely and I love it. Although I'm not sure if this works "Oh, sylvan souls so caught in dreaming state,
if roots entwined in timbers' great displace," - I don't know, I don't like it somehow. . . and the first line of the couplet is one syllable short. . .
But I love the line "as dryad pines for love that’s lost to snows." Beautiful.
"the growing seed of shining splendor
of loves so lost to sinful surrender."
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Ethereal
I have used your poem for a piece of art this is the link :
http://www.redbubble.com/people/catnipmeow/art/2114681-2-the-wood-nymph
if you do not like it let me know and I shall remove it
There is a link right to this page giving you all the credit
Very beautiful poem
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Wow This poem is definately a showcase for your talent I really enjoyed reading this one I am an infant in the woods of fantasy
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OOooOOo
Very imaginative! I love it, especially the ending couplet. Just gave me a tingling sensation down my spine! I would love to meet one of these enticing nymphs! They seem rather interesting, and quite the lookers..
lol
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lovely poem
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Thank you!
It is one of my personal favorites. Thanks for stopping by.
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From bad things good things grow!
Very atmospheric and serene description (especially in first 2 stanzas), and the third stanza induces in the reader's mind an image of 'romantic hibernation'.
Goes really well with the autumnstillness deadwinter music by the way!
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the ending is wonderful, I love poems with creatures like wood nymphs, I write about fairies every so often, it sort of, romantic in a fantasy sort of way.
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these are my favorite lines
The forest spirit stands in nature's cloak
as giant thinks of lover's peaceful face.
very peaceful feeling that goes with this write
I just stop by to say hello see your write.
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Very creative write you have penned here - liked the flow, form and visual images this brings to mind. Nice gold to show for your efforts as well.
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I often wonder about wood nymphs, there again I am probably bark(ing) mad! This is a great fantasy/mythological sonnet. I couldn't improve on it. I haven't written a Shakespearian sonnet for ages. There again neither has Shakespeare.
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good write! good write!!
it was exciting and peaceful at the same time. you know, trees have always been here. just like the rocks. does a tree make a sound, if it falls and no one is there to here it? i think it does. that kind of thing. and there ain't noting like a 'sinful surrender'. love gypsyfish. good write.
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Beautiful wording! So softly romantic in a sense, calming to ones' spirit. Great images!
Congrats on the well-deserved Gold on this!!!
Loved it!
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Appreciation!
Thanks for this wonderful contribution to The Poetic Bandits reading list, and congrats on the HM, so well deserved
~Lilac
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I just love the feel of a Sonnet, there is just something about them that is so captivating.
I have got an image of winter as I read this and everything frozen in time. Yet there is a strong loving warmth to it. I feel as though they're waiting for a time to come when they will be together again.
This was a pleasure
Take care, Greg.
Luv ~sweetness~ xx
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Interesting read, some nice imagery, over all for me tho it just wasn't something I could get in to...a bit too girly lovey dovey for my tastes, but a decent write over all.
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very sweet write good job
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Beautiful!
Genuinely poetic - I love this write with its immensely deep, thought provoking power of pure love.
If roots entwined in timbers displace,
virgin souls could naturally create;
The sweet growing seed of soulled splendor
of two loves, so lost, in sinful surrender.
So so very lovely to read
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Filled with beauty and gracefulness. The imagery was stellar and the flow was great! Thanks for entering and good luck!
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I Love 'sylvan lovers'
the whole poem had a beautiful graceful feel
with a sureity..rooted..confident love
Beautiful 
Lib x x x s
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Lovely piece with excellent flow and imagery. A great write hun, thanks for the entry. Hugs, Bunny
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This made me think of a composite of two wood nymphs; the one who fell in love with Narcissus and the one who was turned into a tree to escape the love-crazed Pan. Lovely imagery and it paints a sad, nostalgic picture. Very eloquent indeed! Thank you for entering the contest!
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Wow this is amazing. What wonderful imagery and emotions. I could not pick a favorite part I loved it all. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest Theresa
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Insanely descriptive...:)
Was the capitalization for 'her' accidental or a typo?
You create life in things we normally pass by in life--trees, for instance. You make humans even more lifelike.
"in winter snows"
I think 'snow' would be adequate...but that's my thinking.
My favorite lines/phrases:
"frozen in space"-I just like it.
"Daydream of coma"-There's something so morbid and macabre about this line and poetic all at the same time!
"its spirit invested in nature's cloak"-Ooh. You make the spirit visible in my mind...very nice.
Jessica
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terrific descriptions its a sad but beautiful picture youve painted, i enjoyed reading it
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WOw.. this was really good my friend.. I think that it could become a really great piece if maybe you added just a little to it.. I mean it's really good now its just that I can see a really good picture here if it was just a little longer..But the image with these few lines is a beauty too.. Well done..
Jetleena
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