Last night she slept quietly
shutting out the reality in a weightless world.
But in her dreams she's coming across
storm after storm
with the rain beginning to pour and shake
the ground with it's thundering grace.
She's quickly soaked[in rising sweat]
as she runs;splashing through puddles
away from a beating frame of ache.
She's so ready to give up
and collapse into her own restless oblivion.
She's taking boxes out of hiding
[names;faces;and words]
and dropping them to a fiery depth.
He's becoming just another picture to burn.
The flames licking the creases
she created in her rage of disaster.
And now she's watching their faces
dissapear[maybe if you close your eyes
you'll eventually wish me away--x
and maybe one day I'll simply dissapear]
She's never had a dream come true
and wishes at 11:11 are left to the sky
to conquer and tear down
just like he brought her
crashing down into ocean waves
creating hurricanes and warning signals.
She's got nothing left
just a fucking war zone
torn and broken down by enemy lines.
[inhale;exhale]
He can't feel her heartbeat slowing
he doesn't seem to notice her falling down
She's closing her eyes'
wishing herself away
[She's just another picture to burn]
m. m. o'malley
4-13-08
9 24 p m
Author notes
I'm thinking this is pretty self explanatory
let me know what you think.
♥©
WishMeAway--x
A contest entry
- Anything goes ♥ [READ THE ONE RULE!]--Extended by She Stole My Voice.
300 points, ended May 2, 2008, 19 entries
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Comments
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I love the theme of this poem, it feels like lyrics to a sad song.
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thank you very much.
im happy you liked it.
i havent read this in a while and reading it now really makes me sad
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sad but amazing i love it gr8 job keep it up!!xD
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why thank you very much.
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Beautiful ending lines.
"another picture to burn"
Beautiful!
Thank you for entering.
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why thank you my dear.
happy you liked it
happy judging
♥
[always]
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beautiful...
sad...
i love it
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Thanks =]
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oh my..
wow i can't even begin to explain this one. girl i love it, it's probably one of your best yet =]
"i keep thinking that some day you'll turn into just a tragic memory; one only burned into my mind by the breathless kiss you left me with....."
maybe you can use that line somewhere; sometime.
good to be back on.
beautifulXlie
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Well, thanks so much sweetie.
im happy you liked it.
i think it's the best i've done in a really long time too.
and i really like that line.
i wrote it down in my rough draft book. I'll see what i can do.
i miss you sweetie.
always.♥.
im happy you're back too. =]]
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Well that is sad. Beautiful though.
I'm glad its not about me. I would want to die.
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Sometimes i wish i could wish him to death...if that makes sense.
He, my darling, has hurt me once again, and im not quite sure how to deal with it.
I was a little on the uneasy side and couldn't think of anything but what have i seriously done wrong this time.
i didn't know it would hurt as bad as last time.
i love you darling,
always.♥
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This was amazing baby,
absolutely beautiful. Just like you.
But so sad.
Todays been so bad baby, I'm crying.
It's awful.
Iloveyou.
like glitter&&glue
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Today has been awful for me too.
we screwed up again and hurt each other again.
i love you loni.
what happened to my beautiful girl.
always.♥
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stuff =/
always.♥
like glitter&&glue
♥
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"shutting out the reality in a weightless world"
Oh sweetpea! That is beautiful!
Pleaaase finish this and send me an IM when you have!
Much love.
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Thanks so much sweetie for the comment.
i hope you like it lots!
let me know what you think of the finish product!!
love.love.
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"ngiht"
should be "night"
Oh and even though I know who this is,
you still need to put your screen name in the little note thingy :]
Tell me when it's finished <3
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ish is finished.
and let me know what you think of the finished product.
thanks dear!
♥.love.love.
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well...i like the begining
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well i finished the poem now
if you'd like to read it.
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