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The magical cavern

The crystalline waters,
Flow all around.
Not one single ripple,
Is making a sound.

The angel of darkness,
The angel of light.
Both stand on an island,
Where nothing is right.

Rocks float in the air,
From sea floor to roof.
In magical caverns,
Where nothing dare move.

The angel of darkness,
Says to that of light.
"Just spread out your wings,
And let us take flight."

The magical cavern,
Then does hear the sound.
Of dark taking light,
As they rise off the ground.

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  • quantumsurveyor
    July 3, 2008
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    You have done so well to produce this charming piece from the picture prompt.


  • toomysterious
    July 3, 2008
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    Well worthy of the gold. This has a lovely, dream-like, fantasy feel to it. Thanks for sharing.


  • Hetha gold member
    July 2, 2008

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    Nice flow and imagery based on your prompt. Congrats on snagging the gold.

  • piccola silver member
    July 1, 2008

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    congrats on the gold. I really like the story and the rhyme and flow were really good. I'm betting on the light at the very end though ...

    as for rhyme, someday read rakerman1 ... he writes nothing but very good rhyme. Sometimes I think he waits for perfection, but anyway, here's what he says.

    "rhyming isn't hard; it's all the words that come between." (my hero)


  • MrCrepsley
    May 21, 2008
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    WOW!!!!!Good luck in the contest

  • Eusebius
    May 20, 2008

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    bravo

    this is another excellent rhymed poem...they are had to do, but you have a fine here! bravo... bravo... bravo...


  • WesBreezyxxx
    April 14, 2008
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    nice

    i liked this poem.

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    April 12, 2008
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    I've been in caverns before. They're awesome!!!!
    Great job. Good luck in the contest.
    Brian


  • seasonsoflove
    April 12, 2008

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    This is a new take on the picture... great job on this! it is amazing... i was expecting people to use the picture more then anything else thats why i added it... great job on this! best of luck in this contest!

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