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Iceberg

Each more iceberg than island
we float submerged so deep
as to remain unknowing of ourselves:
a mass piloted by lurking forces.

No wonder then
we hole ourselves and others.
Yet the spirit flames within the berg,
ice flares to flesh,
body becomes mind
in shafted clarity
before the shining slips again
into the deep.


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  • cricketjeff gold member
    May 7, 2008

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    Nice metaphorical poem. Clearly well thought through. I have enjoyed reading this, all the best in the contest.


  • masterblaster gold member
    April 15, 2008
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    Hi, wonderful my friend, aml Di


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    April 14, 2008

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    Stunning work here. The fact is it is so true too. Great imagery that this produces. I like the metaphor of the iceberg as an island. Keep writing.

    Love
    Wayne Leon
    x


    • crystaldust gold member
      April 14, 2008
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      Hi. Thank you for reading this one and your comments which are encouraging.
      Joy


  • Puppydog gold member
    April 12, 2008

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    WONDERFUL

    I believe everyone feels this emptiness and overwhelming sinking feeling. Now and then there is a ray of light, of hope and then the darkness comes again.


    • crystaldust gold member
      April 13, 2008
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      Hallo again, my friend. Interesting comment - thank you for reading this one. Hope all is well with you. Joy

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