Long flowing branches nearly touch the ground.
Small slender leaves look like teardrops weeping.
Towering tree hides small creatures that bound.
Sullen breeze creates a grass skirt sweeping.
Rigid layered gray bark protects its core.
Years of withstanding the change of season.
Feathered wings of many colors nest galore.
Large circle of shade cools from baking sun.
Grandpa’s rage breaks off a long single strand.
Us boys bent over bare skin gleaming in air.
The crack of the whip leaves a welting brand.
Running free from flaying slashes that tear.
Boys whimpering from tree’s swaying escape.
The willow now has voice to match its shape.
Author notes
Although I never felt the wrath of the weeping willows whip many a neighborhood boy did. The old tree stood a half block from my boyhood home.
This is written in the sonnet form abab cdcd efef gg.
and each line contains 10 syllables.
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The beginning had a very peaceful effect on me. Your words take me there. I imagine that a lashing with a branch would hurt like hell. Ouch. Great write angel.
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Thank you Guin for reading and commenting. Always good to hear from you.
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Beautiful write, Charley. I liked the title of this piece and the poem seemed to be very metaphorical, with the title and the third stanza with the part of the whip. Trees aren't the only ones that cry. Very well written sonnet form, as well. Keep that pen flowing.
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Thank you Haley for reading and commenting. I always enjoy hearing from you.
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You're welcome, Charley. I always enjoy your poems. Hope you're well these days.
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My grandma had a large weeping willow that was the most awesome climbing tree . . . I had to wince at the 3rd stanza, and I must admit to smiling a bit as well. The couplet excellent!
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Thank you as always for reading and commenting. Glad you enjoyed.
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Good job ck
You have a fine English sonnet here. An excellent addition to your work. Keep writing
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Thanks Bob for reading and commenting.
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wow .. ya.. that was my grandparents thing.. although my grandmother prefered paddles and wooden spoons..
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thank you passionate-poet for reading and commenting. Yeah I had the paddle many of times but not the spoons. Thanks again, I appreciate it.
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Excellent
Oh wow!!!!!
What a wonderfully penned piece of poetry.
Well done.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful talents with us.
*S* Cynthia
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Thank you Cynthia for being a loyal reader. This was a fun write. Alway appreciate hearing from you. Thanks again.
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