Eccentric souls wash dishes
with nuclear bomb dust
trying to react to diplomacy
is never a shallow thing
but trying to wear underwear
with a suit to tight
is like wandering in the daylight
with your lipstick inside out
How faded are my visions
My glasses are combustible
My soul is ever fleeting
My nose has been blown.
Author notes
B
A contest entry
- Quirky Poetry That Actually Means Something by Sprite.
1500 points, ended April 20, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like this entry and will consider it strongly. But, it does hurts you that you have the grammatical error.
"The suit to tight" should be "the suit too tight."
~ Joyce -
Excellent example of what Sprite wants in my opinion. It has so many colors and visuals that they all get thrown in the air to see how it falls and much of it can be left up to the reader.
The ending was a little stark in light of the flow
of the rest of it. Just my thought on it.
Otherwise...hehehe..a good one here!
[to] tight-- should be [too] form/spell.
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Oh, I get it. You combined A. and B. in your poem. I had wanted (A) in your author notes. Nonetheless this is a nice effort. (You have one grammatical error, though.)
All in all, I like your entry. Thank you for entering.
~ Joyce
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