Turbulent now are long dark nights,
solitary figure concealed from light.
Captive within the shadows domain,
dwelling beneath veils of pain.
Upon thrones of silvery ice,
is where you long to live your life.
Noxiously stuck in the bowels of time,
poison flowing through cyanide minds.
Cardinal sin won't set you free,
moonshine nights charge burning fees.
Screaming majestic notes in the air,
pondering thoughts are no longer there.
Captivating all with magical lure,
one who sits divine and pure.
Pleading for the only true knight,
to take her on adventures flight.
Author notes
Prompt; anything.
BG made by me.
A contest entry
- Poetic Challenge Group... ONLY!!! by luckynsincere.
600 points, ended April 28, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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So enchanting
I love this dark adventure
Perfect in everyway!
~Pastel
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I love this. I see that you never let your gaurd down while in a challenge... lol. and in this challenge that is a good thing
cause I am REAL sneaky. Your rhyme appears and flows flawlessly. You are an enchanting poetess. And I see your talent not only lies in your pen... but in art as well. The background is great. Keep it up. You are amazing us with every poem you write!
Mel
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Wow thank you so much
Glad you liked it.
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excellent! numbing ones pain to the world sounds wonderful right now... love this sissy...best to you in the contest~ blessings always~ Trisha
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Aww how gorgeous is that!!?? So sad at the beginning and ending with such yearning... I don't know how you do it hunny but you come up with the most fantastic stuff even without a prompt... and your rhyme is always so flawless!!!
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Poetic brilliance
Your metaphor, the thoughts, and the way you built up the atmosphere.
Scientific excellence is also brought into this piece
Full admiration to you
Julie
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WOW mommy this totally incredible. OMG I love the background, its totally awesome. I love all the colors so much. your poem speaks for itself and its loud and clear. though I must agree with Arkbear about the addiction piece. not quite what this is about, but you say it with such strength.
good luck in the contest.
kat
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Hi Pink ~
I had to read this 5 times....and the only thing I could come up with.....is entrapment of addiction....whether it be of mental disease, or coccaine or meth.....still not quite sure....I'm sorry ~
However.....if I was to stick all of those scenerios into place, this is by far the best entry yet ~
If I am wrong, please don't tell me until after the contest, as I want your entry to leave its' own impression upon my mind, and let me go from there.......and if I am correct, then by all means, let me know ~
Melanie may not agree with me on this.....but we are not the same person or Judge.....and that is what makes each entry unique to both of us ~
Best read thus far.......and your metaphores are brilliant to say the least ~
....I only hope I am on the right track in understanding this, the way you intened it to be understood :)
Best wishes in the contest,
Bear ~
Score: 99.0
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Hmmmmm
Ya know, when I read your poems I am struck by not only how many you write, but how they are all unique and never cliche. This poem reflects the feelings of life's problems and the wanting desire of those around you...at least I think. Great rhyme scheme, and a plea for hope...really wonderful!
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as I always said, "poems begin with a mood..." and I believe that this piece does... I have to learn to read each line independent of the others- I'm one for trying to create the 'big picture', but some pieces are better read with each line being independent, creating its own separate image and mood, and that's what I think you have here... like certain moments together- do not thing about tomorrow, or yesterday, think about the moment... (could that be the way the female mind works? I wonder...)
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