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Foxie

A flash of black and red and white,
Is all she leaves behind.
She strives in shadows of the night,
With one thing on her mind.

She sneaks up on unwary prey,
Preparing for her kill.
And then in one swift move completes,
Her mission with great skill.

At home her cubs will fight and jump,
For their share of meal.
They leap and bark and sometimes bump,
Each other and then squeal.

When morn does come around once more,
She will finally rest.
Her cubs are content to the core,
While trying to be the best.

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  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    September 7, 2008

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    This is a great poem, you have taken yourself to the subject wonderfully!
    As you've rhymed so well in an a-b, a-b format, I am wondering why you didn't do this with line 1 in stanza 2. It takes nothing away for me, this is just a thought for you to consider if you wish.

    'up on unwary prey (she sneaks),
    Preparing for her kill.
    And then in one swift move completes,
    Her mission with great skill.'

    Good luck in the contest and thank you for entering this.
    I much like this poem... are you really just just 12 years old?

    Sol


  • And Hyetal
    July 12, 2008

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    This is so cute! Foxes are gorgeous animals, yet so adorable, too!

    This poem had great flow and rhyme; really well written.

    ~Cassie


  • Patched Up Ragdoll
    July 12, 2008
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    !! I love foxes! Well written, I loved the flow and the rhyme was superb.

  • piccola silver member
    July 6, 2008

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    I really like the stanza about them leaping and barking...lots of imagery there and your rhyme is great.


  • quantumsurveyor
    July 4, 2008
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    A sweet brush with nature.


  • toomysterious
    July 2, 2008
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    Good poem with nice rhyme and flow.


  • Hetha gold member
    July 2, 2008

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    Lovely poem with some great imagery! Good luck in the contest. Your rhyme is really good, and I like the flow. Keep penning.


  • MrCrepsley
    May 21, 2008
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    Cool.


    it's good. Good luck


  • WesBreezyxxx
    April 19, 2008
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    great write


  • SmartBrick
    April 12, 2008
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    Nice...

  • amy86
    April 12, 2008

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    very true about foxes i had some trying to get into my guinea pig cage not long ago. a very well written poem that shows the true colours of a fox!

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