Looking but not Seeing
Why is it that we live most of our life and miss out on so much?
We are so busy with making money.
Trying to be better than the next fellow,
with the stuff that we have gotten.
We miss the really good things of life.
The smell of sweet flowers ,which we pass along our way.
The beauty of seeing butterflies in flight in the yard.
The joy our child has in playing with a ball.
Oh Why is it that we are so busy doing other things,
That we miss out on so much.
The wonder of just being able to hear, see and taste.
What would you do if we didn’t have these things?
Maybe we should ask someone that dose not have them.
What would it be like not to see your child sweet smiling face.
Why do we not see all the good things, that we have right in front of our faces if we just took the time to look.
Oh good people don’t you see it is time,
to enjoy life and all the things that we have to the fullest.
Oh why do we take these things for granted?
If our life was to end this day.
We could not take our money, are all that we own with us.
So why do we make these things so important in our life.
Rose Patrick April 12,200
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I always enjoy the messages in your poetry and the real life quality of them. Anyone can step into this piece and feel it pertains to just them, when in reality it easily fits us all. Excellent piece
Blesings, Gypsy
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I believe that unless this poem is speaking directly to someone you should change "life" to lives in the 2nd line. Again in the last line of the 1nd stanza "child" should be children unless you are speaking to someone you have a child with. "Dose" should be does in the last line of the fourth stanza. First line of the 5th stanza "child" should be child's. In the second to last stanza "are" should be or. Perhaps, the last punctuation should be a question mark, since it is asking a question.
I really like the meaning of this poem. I completely agree. My mom hassles me all the time for doing this slowly. I only do them slowly to enjoy it.
This is beautiful.
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great piece, but, you need to watch your word usage/spelling...
example...
"If our life was to end this day.
We could not take our money, are all that we own with us."
should be this...
If our life were to end this day
we could not take our money,
or all that we own with us.
just some suggestions, there's more that needs revising
and it should be
(c) Rose Patrick April 12, 2008
All Rights Reserved
too...
some suggestions, there's more that needs to be done
mike
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