It might be nice to say
"the starlight looks pretty in your eyes"
instead of being preoccupied by
the ways you release my sighs.
It would be civil if I could
just accept a complement on my dimples,
rather than remember my smiles are caused
by tooth-brushed nipples.
And how polite would it be
if I dazzled with beauty and wits?
Rather than grope your bum
and flash my tits?
How strange it would be
if I were one of the romantic girls
rather than one, that while you sleep,
boings your curls.
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This is romantic poetry at its best people! You'll never get more favours than by giving a boy this lovely ditty, trust me, I'm a law student.
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I loved this poem, I thought it was brilliant
It decribes a relationship of how is so real instead of cliched
Brillaint K8...xxx
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"rather than remember my smiles are caused
by tooth-brushed nipples."
man that would make some good porn...
lovely poem...shows a real relationship and quite eloquently at that.
The rhymeing was spot on, and the wit-dry, ironic, and perfect in tone...
dimples and nipples have a slighly odd ring though, a bit off...
nothing too major though...made me grin.
~Hippie
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I know it was off, but I couldn't think on much to rhyme with nipples, I probably should read more of the erotica on this site.
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cripples.
tickles.
ripples.
zipples.
~Hippie
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liked your poem
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You're nice, cause I hate it personally.
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