in a scotland gleann
enemies lay side by side
a young female warrior
stands amongst the dead
on the battle field
wishing to take back
three little words
she had done and said
the deaths of these
poor and innocent men
are no more to her
than the blood on her hand
the battle that day
had been won but to her
she had lost too many men
because of one command
her men had out numbered
the viking five to one
but by the end of the battle
she had lost more men
her men had been fighting
to protect their land
and their families
out there on the gleann
as she stands there
she stares out at the loch
soon her people will have
to fight once again
knowing soon more will come
knowing soon they
will be over run
but the questions is when
how long can her men
her people hold on
how long until
the next boat comes
how long can her people
hold on until she must
surrender how long
until exhaustion succumbs
four days go by before
the next boat was seen
in the loch her people
once again prepared for war
the viking war lord
walked up to her fortress
with his trusted men
they didnt want to fight anymore
the warlord had watched
the battle from the loch
saw how she was quick on her feet
saw how she commanded her men
the warlord wanted a truce
to be able to learn
from such an expert general
as they talked out on the gleann
the next year
out there on that gleann
where they had been
so much blood
a wedding was performed
between the warlord
and the female warrior
out there in the mud
Author notes
this was written about a story my grandfather used to tell me when i was young about a young female warlady who had faught the vikings and how she ended up married to one who had been the brother of the man she had single handed killed herself and how she had out smarted the vikings during the battle even thought it cost her men..
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I liekd the way you told us this story ...
Althought the spacing made it hard for me to read, it didn't take away from the poem too much, and i loved how you didn't try to force any rhymes but instea let the story tell itself - i really appreciate that!
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well penned. i liked the portrayal of bloodshed and also the portrayal of marriage and love. thanks for sharing and keep up the good work.
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Interesting spellings here......................
Interesting but often wrong........................
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Beautiful
This is excellently written; totally enjoyed. Great story about a story that your grandfather passed down to you. Now you have passed it on to all of us. Great Job. Melody
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wow.. this is absolutely... breathtaking...
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While we're on spelling, how about mud rather than mudd, and performed rather than preformed? And maybe it should be a Scottish glen? However, the poem has a wandering, saga like quality which is rather appealing. Good.
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This appeals to me very much.
May I correct a small point - there is only one "n" in "glen" (although "gleann" in Gaelic)
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lovely. stories passed on are so beautiful. i love the formatting too.
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I love the stories laura. Sometimes passes on stories can be so wonderful. You did a good job with this one. an dyour theonly person who writes longer stories than I do.
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I like this...and the fact that it involves a heroine is just plain wonderful...
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