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throwing the pitch

so much confusion
so many lies
so much heart break
so many crys

thats the idea
of a teenage life
the driving force
of the proverbial knife

some forget
that this all doesn't matter
just throwing the pitch
away from the batter

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  • mandikins
    April 14, 2008

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    AWESOME WRITE! I think this is one of my TOP favorites of yours. I enjoyed the meaning and metephor of this piece. Plus you always use great vocabulary so i dont really have to tell you i love that. Cant wait for more!!!

    <3 mandy


  • Cat10
    April 12, 2008
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    agian, great poem