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El Bandito

Hand steady; Never look into the devil's eyes
Trigger ready; Through the heart, a devil dies
Breathing hard; Walk ten paces
Watch your guard; Not the grinning faces

First pace; Keep standing strong
Second pace; Whistle this song
Third pace; Knees buckle; hands shake
Fourth pace; Legs give; Feet ache
Fifth pace; This heavy metal rests in palm
Sixth pace; Death amongst this endless calm
Seventh pace; No sounds of whisky breath
Eighth pace; Silent howls of a risky death
Ninth pace; feet of stone
Tenth pace; Stands alone


Turn


Hand steady; Never look into the devil's eyes
Trigger ready; Through the heart, a devil dies
We turn; Though, don't aim too close
Eyes burn; Forever quell these ghosts


Fire


Live forever; Lying under bloody skies
Failed endeavors; Dying with hollowed eyes
Glowing glories; stand so old
Ending stories; Sand, so cold

The Pace and rhyme

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  • Perception
    April 12, 2008

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    I didn't much like this one. Although it had an interesting idea, I didn't find it much of my style...

    Sorry...
    Thanks for entering though