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[ so damn close ]

so damn close
yet so far away
longing to hear
the sweet words you say

doesn't matter your mood
I'll take what I can
it all reminds me of times
times before I ran

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  • mandikins
    April 17, 2008

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    so sweet! i love it! so much meaning in so little words. To me the cutest and sweetest part is the 2nd stansa and the 2nd and 3rd lines. Have you showed her this one?

    <3 mandy


  • Cat10
    April 12, 2008

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    aww, such a cute piece and well written


  • poeticweaver gold member
    April 12, 2008

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    Very cute piece, and shares your heart and soul.
    Thanks for sharing, and keep on penning poet!

    Peace.

    -Timothy aka poeticweaver~