sorrow, angst and pain
only to drive you insane
with love someone always gets hurt
teasing like a flirt
then anger comes with a spurt
giving and taking all abrupt
can make anyone erupt
but in the end you always cry
wanting only just to die
needing no more pain
with nothing else to gain
we pick up the pieces
until our life increases
with the same pride
happiness and stride
just to be knocked back down
and then we only drown
in unhappiness and sorrow
with little time to borrow
trying to fight back
to pick up our slack
that we created for each other
only its starting to smother
how we feel only scared to see
what we have done trying to be
able to build our walls
to hide the real you
so no one will get close to who
we really are nor
seeing what we are or
what we really act like
to know if we are alike
only to be thrown
back into our sorrow
A contest entry
- I want your Best of Best! by Country Gal.
316 points, ended April 18, 2008, 13 entries
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Comments
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i love the line,
with love someone always gets hurt
i can so relate -
really good job daddy. i like how u explained it all.
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good job daddy! i liked it alot. good way for u to express ur feelings.
ur daughter
brittanie
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Very good and very true.
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wow this is a great poem
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I LOVED IT
So awsome I hope she loves it truely heart felt -
Bravo..what else can I say... Do I tell you pretty words of how this touched me? Do I say this was beyond beautiful, full of emotion? it is all that and more...Well done..
Jetleena : -
this poem is really amazing, the flow is so unique and has incrediable rythm. i enjoyed reading it, keep it up! (:
~Mandy~
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Wow
well this was just amazing... it flowed very well and i agree with all that you said. you expressed it very well.
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So sad, but very well expressed.
Thanks for sharing here, and keep on penning on!
Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver.
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