This life's fire,
Taken from inside
This poor body
That could not
Afford to give
Life to a form
That took more
Than was offered
And so this body
That could not give
Was sacrificed
So this form could live.
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Comments
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This is good! I like the way it flows. Thanks for entering my contest! :)
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hey there this was a nice tale of giving back of yourself. this reminds me of parents that die from the birth of their child,
"And so this body
That could not give
Was sacrificed
So this form could live."
thanks for entering my competition -
A very good take on the given prompt.
Thanks for sharing here.
All the best in the contest poet.
Peace. -Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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