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10 Words Deep.

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I gazed into her eyes,
oceans of deep pastel blue,

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  • arafura gold member
    April 12, 2008
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    Well said mate!


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    April 12, 2008
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    Bazza, I'm going to question you again here. For me, transferring the epithet "deep" from "oceans" to "pastel" doesn't quite work, as the two words seem a little contradictory. Would it work better with "deep oceans of pastel blue", or am I missing your point entirely (probably).

    Three claps, however, for a simple thought, well expressed without fuss.