come play in the garden with me
forget your worries and befriend
a whimsical realm of make pretend
dancing and singing joyfully
elves and faeries flutt'ring about
come play in the garden with me
with creatures only we can see
you will enjoy yourself no doubt
there's no war or betrayal here
this place, our sanctuary
come play in the garden with me
a hav'n to all who hide from fear
a secret spot where all are free
beyond the river and the trees
elves and faeries dance in the breeze
come play in the garden with me
Author notes
A Quatern is a sixteen line French form composed of four quatrains. It is similar to the Kyrielle
and the Retourne. It has a refrain that is in a different place in each quatrain. The first line of
stanza one is the second line of stanza two, third line of stanza three, and fourth line of stanza
source: shadowpoetry.com
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This is wonderful. I absolutely love it! Thanks for such an uplifting write.
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Excellent
What a great use of the form. You did this so skillful and masterful. Thank you for sharing.
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This is outstanding!! Amera sent me this link, and I am very glad she did! I have seen many forms that she has done, and everyone is amazing. And this is just like them!!
You made this one come alive with your words!! What an amazing feat!! I love it!!
Thanks for sharing this one with me!!
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Ahhhh
The secret is revealed Amera has been getting you to write her poetry for ages!!!
This is really superb work, Amera has a wonderful pupil.
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Nice composition.
This is quite impressive and give off a fairytale a a real feel to what you give here, as most ably, a realistic thought, on whether they exist or not. Very good indeed, I have to tell you,
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Incredible...
I know nothing of the technique you used, but I love the emotion... It was like hope dancing upon the way of a dream... God bless you dear heart... You keep on writing now, don't ever stop!
Blessings... ~ James ~
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First I want to say fantastic job with the form and so well done it flows so easily and you made me feel I was in your garden with you as I read these wonderful words! Excellent!
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You are quite skilled at creating a wonderful fantasy place where we all should like to visit! I know I would join you in a heartbeat... Nice combination of form and imagery. Very well done! And you are only 15??? WOW!!!
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Och it's the Fair Maid o' Tay!
Lovely poem here, very well done.
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WONDERFUL SWEET
I do love the sweet flowing magic in your words...a place of peace, love and happiness. You have brought life to your words and pictures for the heart to play with
Niaish little one for sharing with me
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This my dear is perfect. From the form on down to the content. Each word drew this reader in. I am very impressed with this piece. I would love to be right there...in that fantasy forgetting about everything!
Great job honey.
Tory
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aww... This is a delightful fantasy! It's filled with image, motion and happiness. You did a wonderful job on the Quaturn and by using that form, you made the poem come alive. Bravo!
Love,
Amera
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Thanks for sharing with me. She is a awesome poet following a Wold Class Poet.
Love
Tory
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